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# Karma
They's an old say'n
amid moun'tn folk
true as true can be
I reckon
Ya can't push a snowball
down tha slope
then jes walk away
Whatever it hits
ya responsible;
whatever it destroys
ya liable
Ya can scream
til tha cows come home
Or til tha avalance
covers ya up
Buried in tha drift
of yah own mak'n
still yell'n,
"I was jes tend'n
my own garden!"
Think for ya push
cause if ya ain't taught
by someone, at least
won't be long for ya learn:
Chick'ns always
come home ta roost
Might as well accept
responsibility
an ask forgiveness
for it blindsides ya
knee-deep in shit
Cause ya already stink'n
( pheweeee!!!! )
ta high heaven
of guilt!
Bach! BAAAAACH!
~
amid moun'tn folk
true as true can be
I reckon
Ya can't push a snowball
down tha slope
then jes walk away
Whatever it hits
ya responsible;
whatever it destroys
ya liable
Ya can scream
til tha cows come home
Or til tha avalance
covers ya up
Buried in tha drift
of yah own mak'n
still yell'n,
"I was jes tend'n
my own garden!"
Think for ya push
cause if ya ain't taught
by someone, at least
won't be long for ya learn:
Chick'ns always
come home ta roost
Might as well accept
responsibility
an ask forgiveness
for it blindsides ya
knee-deep in shit
Cause ya already stink'n
( pheweeee!!!! )
ta high heaven
of guilt!
Bach! BAAAAACH!
~
Written by
AgentStarling
(Clarice)
Published 5th Aug 2018
Author's Note
For Jade's hashtag comp
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Re. # Karma
Anonymous
5th Aug 2018 5:46pm
It's nice to finally see you dipping those *delicious* toes of yours into these poetry competitions.
An avalanche of shit ....
Now there is a metaphor that will leave an offal lingering stench with the reader's senses.
An avalanche of shit ....
Now there is a metaphor that will leave an offal lingering stench with the reader's senses.
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Re: Re. # Karma
5th Aug 2018 5:59pm
Moun'tn people don't play wit rabble-rousers caus'n hahm ta good folk, Doctah Lectah. Or so mah Gran always said.
Thought I'd give'm a go. Gotta keep mah eyes on ya.
Thought I'd give'm a go. Gotta keep mah eyes on ya.
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Anonymous
5th Aug 2018 6:06pm
I have enough on my plate as it is, but your *scrumptious* eyes would complement those toes very nicely.
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5th Aug 2018 10:52pm
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5th Aug 2018 11:50pm
Re. # Karma
6th Aug 2018 2:52pm
I'm just sayin, all the rich folks build em houses
on the TOP of the mountain,
they nevah get hit by snowballs, as much?
but anyway I done that to Sarah house,
'n nobody caught me yet!!!
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8th Aug 2018 00:30am
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22nd Sep 2018 9:50pm
Re. # Karma
22nd Sep 2018 7:33pm
it would be a lot of screaming if the cows stayed out drinking all night. also if it was you at the top ofthe hill rolling the snowball down hill and walking away surely you'd avoid the avalanche.
Its appears as a poem in two distinct halves, the first half is fine talking about mountain peoples wisdom but the second half seem unrelated and just full of unveiled threats. are the threats aimed at anyone in particular? they had better watch out eh?
good effort though :-)
Its appears as a poem in two distinct halves, the first half is fine talking about mountain peoples wisdom but the second half seem unrelated and just full of unveiled threats. are the threats aimed at anyone in particular? they had better watch out eh?
good effort though :-)
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Re. # Karma
Anonymous
23rd Sep 2018 6:21pm
"Ya can't push a snowball
down tha slope
then jes walk away"
Some people do it the hard way; push their snowball uphill, get frustrated at their lack of progress and take out their frustrations on the "competition".
Then they blame the "competition" whenever they end up slipping in the snow and get flattened.
#karma
down tha slope
then jes walk away"
Some people do it the hard way; push their snowball uphill, get frustrated at their lack of progress and take out their frustrations on the "competition".
Then they blame the "competition" whenever they end up slipping in the snow and get flattened.
#karma
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Re: Re. # Karma
23rd Sep 2018 8:03pm
there's a competition for rolling a snowball uphill? who knew? Is it a Winter Olympic Event? I heard it was a solo event and the crowed just pointed and laughed at the participant before being flattened by the avalanche avoiding participant, that would be much more fun
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Re. # Karma
24th Sep 2018 1:56am
Why Mistah Blaze, what an honah tah have yah he'yah. How raght you ahe, Sah. How raght yah ahe.
We got a say'n fer them kind in these moun'ns. Two watts short of a bug zappah, they ahe.
We got a say'n fer them kind in these moun'ns. Two watts short of a bug zappah, they ahe.
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24th Sep 2018 8:57am
or you could be a cheese sandwich short of a picnic, a head short of a brain or a dead duck short of a Chinese dinner,.....
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Anonymous
24th Sep 2018 1:58pm
I need to visit your mountains; the simplicity of living and wisdom to be gleaned from every front porch tocker sounds enticing.
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24th Sep 2018 5:37pm
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Anonymous
24th Sep 2018 5:42pm
Bless you and yawl out there in them hills. 💕
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