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Penance
Toxic shame lingers
like pale, dense fog
in early morning hours
hauntingly, it echoes
hindering slumber
and assuredly devours
Unsettled restlessness
of a broken soul
troubled, vacant stare
heavy, self-appointed
and battered cross
my weakened shoulders bear
Through tearful lenses
I easily see
my penance has just begun
who shall save me
from myself?
alas, I've come undone
like pale, dense fog
in early morning hours
hauntingly, it echoes
hindering slumber
and assuredly devours
Unsettled restlessness
of a broken soul
troubled, vacant stare
heavy, self-appointed
and battered cross
my weakened shoulders bear
Through tearful lenses
I easily see
my penance has just begun
who shall save me
from myself?
alas, I've come undone
Published 2nd Jul 2018
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3rd Jul 2018 4:14pm
Mel, as you well know, I empathize completely with yiur words expressed in this flowing piece. This passage especially rings true:
"heavy, self-appointed
and battered cross"
We do it to ourselves, don't we? Brava!
"heavy, self-appointed
and battered cross"
We do it to ourselves, don't we? Brava!
4th Jul 2018 9:30am
We certainly do! Often our own worst critics. Thank you lovely for taking the time😘
15th Jul 2018 2:00am
such a beautifully dreamy write I found myself becoming lost and wanting to stay there :-))))
Awesome ink :-))))))))
Awesome ink :-))))))))
16th Jul 2018 8:29pm
Sadly, feeling a bit stuck there myself. Thank you for taking the time to comment and the RL. As always, I appreciate your support.
7th Aug 2018 4:06am
Looking glass poetry.... that's what I feel.
Your reflection could be my own.
Relatable
EW
Your reflection could be my own.
Relatable
EW
9th Aug 2018 11:29am
EW,
Thank you kindly. Your comment is much appreciated and the RL is an honour.
Mel
Thank you kindly. Your comment is much appreciated and the RL is an honour.
Mel
It's worth coming back to, or recommending to others, that's all. But you are awesome!
10th Jan 2019 7:45pm
Wonderful imagery and metaphors. Only we can save ourselves. Thanks for the expression, and for sharing your poetry!
