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Erotomania
Standing against the bathroom
wall, I open my legs
to my handsome groom
who loves new positions
anywhere he wants
anyhow he wants
any time he wants
He is big with wants
He fondles my vagina
for the longest time
Touching, licking, lapping
I wonder what he finds there
a few dollars and a dime?
or maybe something
like a downy hare?
In bed he suckles my breasts
Like an overgrown baby
He sucks and smacks his lips
His fingers exploring me down there
Rubbing and poking and prodding
Making me come with his tickling
He likes to be on top
My legs splayed under him
He thrusts and thrusts non-stop
Until he is totally limp
when he is done
He does it again
He puts his face between my legs
and licks me like ice cream
He sucks me and never gags
even as my juice runs
He takes it all in
when that's done,
he starts again
One of his hands are on my crotch
when we go for a drive
He keeps in touch
with his favourite spot
All the time, even when we dine
We sit close together
so he can
Making love is well and fine
Oh I love it, my favourite past time
But if its almost all night
and half a day, every day
It gets rather thin
So there are complaints
He walks away today
He follows his new obsession
They deserve each other
They have been having sessions
The night before and all day yesterday
All I can say is 'hooray'
wall, I open my legs
to my handsome groom
who loves new positions
anywhere he wants
anyhow he wants
any time he wants
He is big with wants
He fondles my vagina
for the longest time
Touching, licking, lapping
I wonder what he finds there
a few dollars and a dime?
or maybe something
like a downy hare?
In bed he suckles my breasts
Like an overgrown baby
He sucks and smacks his lips
His fingers exploring me down there
Rubbing and poking and prodding
Making me come with his tickling
He likes to be on top
My legs splayed under him
He thrusts and thrusts non-stop
Until he is totally limp
when he is done
He does it again
He puts his face between my legs
and licks me like ice cream
He sucks me and never gags
even as my juice runs
He takes it all in
when that's done,
he starts again
One of his hands are on my crotch
when we go for a drive
He keeps in touch
with his favourite spot
All the time, even when we dine
We sit close together
so he can
Making love is well and fine
Oh I love it, my favourite past time
But if its almost all night
and half a day, every day
It gets rather thin
So there are complaints
He walks away today
He follows his new obsession
They deserve each other
They have been having sessions
The night before and all day yesterday
All I can say is 'hooray'
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Anonymous
18th Oct 2011 3:11am
I like that this is a story about characters and not just a list of sexual terms, as some erotic poems are. The "dollars and a dime" line was inspired. Funny and evocative. My one reservation is with the phrase "down there". It always makes me giggle, sounding as it does like something a prudish aunt would say. That's just me though.
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18th Oct 2011 11:16am
Thanks Heslopian...I know. That is suppose to be a bit of a comic relief...hahaha
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Anonymous
18th Oct 2011 3:53am
Enjoyable read, Grace. Made me smile, and I felt refreshed after finishing it as opposed to turned on. I'm happy about that as a matter of fact. Thank you. ^_^
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18th Oct 2011 11:17am
I wonder though.........
18th Oct 2011 4:16am
......as I read this, is this about a positive pleasurable situation or is it reflecting on something that is "overdone?" At the end he's leaving with his new intrest. I am missing something here.
This is very intriguing 4 me as I am not easily lost or misled.
This is very intriguing 4 me as I am not easily lost or misled.
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re: I wonder though.........
well, there were complaints...so he got fed up and left with another person...you think it was not properly stressed up..? thanks for commenting....so kind of you.
2 much of a good thing.....lol
18th Oct 2011 5:41am
it wasnt wut i hoped 2 expect
but i do dig da cliffhanga effect
so did yall split or r yall swingers
tru mr nasty time bringers
if it works 4 u den i guess its a perfect guise
i mean da Bible Clearly Says Solomon was wise....lol
but i do dig da cliffhanga effect
so did yall split or r yall swingers
tru mr nasty time bringers
if it works 4 u den i guess its a perfect guise
i mean da Bible Clearly Says Solomon was wise....lol
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re: 2 much of a good thing.....lol
18th Oct 2011 11:14am
Relate
18th Oct 2011 10:42am
I really like this, I perceived it as a tale of marriage, then the horny groom (much to the brides relief) gets a bit on the side?...
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re: Relate
18th Oct 2011 11:22am
He got too horny so the bride could not cope so she is happy he ran away with another woman...fun eh?
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Anonymous
18th Oct 2011 3:57pm
ldryad,
Loved how you took this from the melancholy tongue-in-cheek to the totally nonchalant at the end.
"He is big with wants" Great line.
enjoyed,
tornado
Loved how you took this from the melancholy tongue-in-cheek to the totally nonchalant at the end.
"He is big with wants" Great line.
enjoyed,
tornado
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18th Oct 2011 4:54pm
It was the mood at the end. I mean, if one is faced with that situation...well. A choice have to be made...just my way of story telling I guess. Thanks for commenting.
Erotomania
Anonymous
18th Oct 2011 5:15pm
I love the way you told the story,enjoyed!
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18th Oct 2011 10:16pm
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20th Oct 2011 2:43pm
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20th Oct 2011 2:54pm
This made me chuckle
23rd Dec 2011 6:40am
My favorite line:
"I wonder what he finds there
a few dollars and a dime?"
The whole thing was great. Loved the ending.
"I wonder what he finds there
a few dollars and a dime?"
The whole thing was great. Loved the ending.
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re: This made me chuckle
23rd Dec 2011 11:07am
GREAT READ WITH MY MORNING COFFEE
Anonymous
3rd Feb 2012 1:46pm
This poem is just marvellous and erotic and funny all at once....It made my morning!
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re: GREAT READ WITH MY MORNING COFFEE
3rd Feb 2012 2:25pm
Thank you somelikeithot. I enjoyed writing it. I was laughing in some places. I think you can tell.
Re: Erotomania
30th Oct 2012 3:27am
Very interesting, funny & erotic...I do like that there is a story here. Good one ;)
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1st Nov 2012 00:40am
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