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eternal fate
rattle the bones
the voices are stirring
they speak in riddles
of what is coming
there is a man with broken heart
stain glass emotions reflect
the full spectrum of his feelings
in deep hues of blue
his depression is known
thoughts of helplessness crowd his mind
he grieves on the inside
the black of a future still unclear
the winds of fate are blowing
but there are obstacles in the way
a great city of self doubt
is a terrible barrier
blocking the man and his vision
there is one who holds his heart
she will be with him eternally
now unto the last portal of understanding
it is as it's always been
each are evolving
while being in constant
revolution around one another
he is needed for her to grow
he is the law
where she is concerned
there is a fire on the way
it will test her love for him
it is as it should be
the fates have spoken
let it be known
all things in their proper order
rattle the bones
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Re. eternal fate
29th May 2018 6:47pm
Reminds me of that witch in Robin hood prince of thieves throwing the old bones 😆
And yeah, over time all things reach their point of change
Hopefully your change is looked on as a motivational loving change
And yeah, over time all things reach their point of change
Hopefully your change is looked on as a motivational loving change
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29th May 2018 6:55pm
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29th May 2018 7:09pm
sounds like you've been consulting the runes Brenda...a mystic reading...as always enthralling....
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29th May 2018 7:14pm
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29th May 2018 7:25pm
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29th May 2018 7:29pm
no giggles dearest Lawrence for all my intelligence i'm not very quick believe it or not lol..
thank you for the smile :)
love Brenda
thank you for the smile :)
love Brenda
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Anonymous
29th May 2018 7:24pm
What a beautiful foretelling, lovely Dark Angel. I do not think I'd like to look into my own. May the man with the stained glass heart prevail and meet his awaiting. The way you foretold his fate was like listening to someone in trance. Beautifully written. I love you
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. eternal fate
29th May 2018 7:31pm
thank you beautiful Willow for showing love on this write..I was somewhat in a trance when I wrote this.. I then thought to edit it to suit me but was told to leave it as it is..
I love you..
love Brenda
I love you..
love Brenda
Re. eternal fate
29th May 2018 7:32pm
I guess it's true a man will always find his fate even in a path he chose to avoid it
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Re: Re. eternal fate
29th May 2018 7:33pm
thank you dearest Poet for the read and your thoughts I'm not sure honestly about fate I'm simply a channel and write what I hear..
love Crim
love Crim
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Anonymous
29th May 2018 8:13pm
This grabbed me like one hit by a thrown stone just lacking the bloodshed my life seems to spill out. Enchanting write friend.
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Re: Re. eternal fate
29th May 2018 8:38pm
thank you graciously dearest Sinister One for your beautifully enthusiastic comment..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. eternal fate
29th May 2018 8:40pm
Your intimate piece had me reading as if it was written about me. A true sign of great poetry.
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29th May 2018 8:45pm
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Anonymous
29th May 2018 9:25pm
The gods hide the faith of mankind. They only decide. If it is meant to be, non human power can withstand it. Excellent again my dear Crimsin. You are truly great in word and style.
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Re: Re. eternal fate
29th May 2018 9:43pm
thank you dearest Juvenalis for such a wonderful and wise comment they do indeed..
love Crim
love Crim
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Re: Re. eternal fate
29th May 2018 9:44pm
thank you graciously dearest John so happy you were moved so deeply with this write as you yourself do me with your own writes..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. eternal fate
30th May 2018 2:07am
Magical write, Crim. A rattle of the bones, and you come up a winner once again.
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30th May 2018 5:10am
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Anonymous
31st May 2018 3:27am
My love the likes of this write are overwhelming - I am feeling so much with them I can’t even properly convey...this will be another added to my wall for the inspiration, strength and belief it evokes...
I love you fiercely
Xoxo always and forever Taryn
I love you fiercely
Xoxo always and forever Taryn
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4th Jun 2018 5:41am
thank you my love for feeling this one so deeply it was speaking directly to those hearts listening.. the spirits in this one..
I love you madly..
love Brenda
I love you madly..
love Brenda