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Alternative Moonlight
Tranquil moonlight
the train quiets the midnight
the blue moon shines its blew light
I’m here to hear your heart delight
the drum beats repeat as the drumstick hits
as fast as your rumbling heartbeats
Don’t like being alone
at the river bank I walk along
The path with a row of houses
the moonlight’s drizzling down their eaves
passing through the new season eve
The lonely poet’s writing poetry
when the dreaming cat tripped over the fallen tree
The thief tiptoes
along the wooden eaves
rolling down and tore his sleeves
fell flat on his face on the oak leaves
Ouch! That hurt
I pricked my finger while sewing a shirt
the thief ran scared and broke his shorts
The cat’s meowing at the moon
the thief’s running after the cat
the poet’s looking at the thief
I’m thinking of the poet
Tonight is a silent moon night
only the cat made noises all night
Been incurably naughty
it’s me here loving your beauty
worship your property and quality
My dear poet
as you know it
things will be going on and on
the moonlight will be always shining upon
watching all the creatures
and blessing our feature
the train quiets the midnight
the blue moon shines its blew light
I’m here to hear your heart delight
the drum beats repeat as the drumstick hits
as fast as your rumbling heartbeats
Don’t like being alone
at the river bank I walk along
The path with a row of houses
the moonlight’s drizzling down their eaves
passing through the new season eve
The lonely poet’s writing poetry
when the dreaming cat tripped over the fallen tree
The thief tiptoes
along the wooden eaves
rolling down and tore his sleeves
fell flat on his face on the oak leaves
Ouch! That hurt
I pricked my finger while sewing a shirt
the thief ran scared and broke his shorts
The cat’s meowing at the moon
the thief’s running after the cat
the poet’s looking at the thief
I’m thinking of the poet
Tonight is a silent moon night
only the cat made noises all night
Been incurably naughty
it’s me here loving your beauty
worship your property and quality
My dear poet
as you know it
things will be going on and on
the moonlight will be always shining upon
watching all the creatures
and blessing our feature
Author's Note
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Re. Alternative Moonlight
21st May 2018 4:22am
"Tonight is a tranquil moon night
only the cat makes noise all night
Been incurably naughty
it’s me here loving your beauty
worship your property and quality"
such a fun jump over the moon....I love this abstract whimsical side of your free form heart...
as that heart reaches to it's destination with style
love
Jeff
only the cat makes noise all night
Been incurably naughty
it’s me here loving your beauty
worship your property and quality"
such a fun jump over the moon....I love this abstract whimsical side of your free form heart...
as that heart reaches to it's destination with style
love
Jeff
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Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
21st May 2018 4:23pm
Dear Jeff, glad you enjoyed my naughty thoughts. Appreciate your love and support!
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
Re. Alternative Moonlight
21st May 2018 5:48am
Jasmine, I love how you infuse scenes of nature in your work...it's something of which we all can relate. This piece has a storybook quality. Brava!
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Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
21st May 2018 4:26pm
Dear Bob, thank you so much for the read and comment. Hope I can write story books for children in the future.
Love
Jasmine
Love
Jasmine
Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
21st May 2018 11:33pm
Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
23rd May 2018 3:42pm
It would be something fun to do in my life. Thank you for the encouragement.
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23rd May 2018 5:31pm
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26th May 2018 5:49pm
Re. Alternative Moonlight
21st May 2018 6:00pm
favorite part!
"things will be going on and on
the moonlight will be always shining upon
watching all the creature
and blessing our feature"
"things will be going on and on
the moonlight will be always shining upon
watching all the creature
and blessing our feature"
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Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
21st May 2018 6:14pm
Dear TIG, that's my favorite part too. Thank you so much for the nice feedback.
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
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Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
21st May 2018 10:27pm
Dear John, glad to have your nice feedback. This is a different work when comparing with my the others. Thank you so much for the encouraging words.
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
Re. Alternative Moonlight
23rd May 2018 7:04pm
i really love this rose! :-) so light hearted , fun , silly and upbeat ! i especially love your reference to the dreaming cat.. nicely done :-)
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Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
24th May 2018 4:22pm
Dear Daffodil, glad you could feel those, and your thoughts really cheer me up. Thank you so much for the read and commenting.
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
Re. Alternative Moonlight
26th May 2018 4:21pm
Beautiful use of repeating rhyme ... not over done ... just right ... carries the poem along ... rewards the ear with its familiarity ... *sigh*
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Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
26th May 2018 5:00pm
Glad to have your read my dear poetess. Thank you for the encouragement...the familiarity is the way you have done and some other poets do...I just found I love doing it...it's fun!
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
Re. Alternative Moonlight
30th May 2018 4:46pm
at the river bank I walk along
the path with a row of houses
this reminds one of ROBERT FROST DID U KNOW HIM ALSO
the path with a row of houses
this reminds one of ROBERT FROST DID U KNOW HIM ALSO
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Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
30th May 2018 4:53pm
Oh, he is one of my favorite poets. I admire all his poems.
Thank you Again for the read.
love
Jasmine
Thank you Again for the read.
love
Jasmine
Re. Alternative Moonlight
31st May 2018 3:43pm
There is something so organic, natural and whimsical feel to this poem that draws the reader in. I enjoyed the natural flow not knowing exactly where you were heading but honestly by the last lines i didn't care cause i was lost in its beautiful world. Excellent imagery.
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Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
31st May 2018 3:58pm
Layla, Glad to have your read and nice feedback. I let my thoughts go by its own way, then it was....thank you so much for the kind words. I am honored.
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
Re. Alternative Moonlight
28th Oct 2018 1:45am
Super interesting read for me!
I struggle with the meaning you gave it but for me this ink has everything --
play, secrets, mischief and misadventure.
Much enjoyed, Poet. :)
I struggle with the meaning you gave it but for me this ink has everything --
play, secrets, mischief and misadventure.
Much enjoyed, Poet. :)
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Re: Re. Alternative Moonlight
29th Oct 2018 3:23am
Thank you my dear friend for the read and the nice feedback.
Nice to meet you here!
love
Jasmine
Nice to meet you here!
love
Jasmine