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and see if I don't
Now watch me smack that-
Asset goodbye in the stock crash-
Helmet without cars slick those running-
Away far and close mind seeking her soul under-
Ground touch to ceremony raising the dark queen-
Queen dark the raising ceremony to touch ground-
Under soul her seeking mind close and far away-
Running those slick cars without helmet-
Crash stock the in goodbye asset-
That smack me watch now....
Asset goodbye in the stock crash-
Helmet without cars slick those running-
Away far and close mind seeking her soul under-
Ground touch to ceremony raising the dark queen-
Queen dark the raising ceremony to touch ground-
Under soul her seeking mind close and far away-
Running those slick cars without helmet-
Crash stock the in goodbye asset-
That smack me watch now....
Written by
runaway-mindtrain
Published 20th May 2018
| Edited 26th May 2018
Author's Note
sideways turns you around half the time in palindrome
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Re. and see if I don't
20th May 2018 9:38am
Excellent , my friend...
The "As Above , So Below" concept is rendered impeccably ,
with your statement and structure in your pen on cyberpad ;
You need to have this printed out , framed , and sold !
The "As Above , So Below" concept is rendered impeccably ,
with your statement and structure in your pen on cyberpad ;
You need to have this printed out , framed , and sold !
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Re: Re. and see if I don't
20th May 2018 9:53am
Re. and see if I don't
20th May 2018 10:14am
Like the flow of this ... the never ending loop with the last line repeating the first .... rich and deep ... quintessential Jeff ... bravo my dear poet
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Re: Re. and see if I don't
20th May 2018 6:20pm
all of a sudden it reversed on me...thanks so my lovely for the read and sweet emotions
love Jeff
love Jeff
Re. and see if I don't
20th May 2018 12:06pm
Dear Jeff...
Your works are refreshing always with
the ideas and concept, and the way you so wisely place those words into a poem...
switched into a new phrase, then to the next...
so brilliant..
Lots to learn,
Love
Hanuel
Your works are refreshing always with
the ideas and concept, and the way you so wisely place those words into a poem...
switched into a new phrase, then to the next...
so brilliant..
Lots to learn,
Love
Hanuel
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Re: Re. and see if I don't
20th May 2018 6:22pm
the mirror fell in my lap..thank you so much my lovely friend
love
Jeff
love
Jeff
Re. and see if I don't
Anonymous
21st May 2018 11:04am
Love the form!
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Re: Re. and see if I don't
21st May 2018 1:51pm
Re. and see if I don't
22nd May 2018 4:39pm
Re: Re. and see if I don't
22nd May 2018 8:13pm
Re: Re. and see if I don't
giggles Jeff I love that line
so powerful I felt it inside..
thank you :)
love Crim
so powerful I felt it inside..
thank you :)
love Crim
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Re. and see if I don't
25th May 2018 4:21pm
I love the shape of this poem. It's like a Chinese lantern. Such a creative write this is, and it took me quite a while to figure out what it is about. Really enjoy reading this, and appreciate its word play.
Nicely written my dear Jeff!
love
Jasmine
Nicely written my dear Jeff!
love
Jasmine
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Re: Re. and see if I don't
thanks love, I think there is less of an overall idea...it is a streaming thought that reverses itself and speaks backwards....just as you said..I was playing with words..
love you
Jeff
love you
Jeff
Re: Re. and see if I don't
7th Jul 2018 00:59am