Haunted Love

Liked the pacing of the form...so much better than mere punctuation....Lawrence

Hi there!!
Thanks for the lovely R&R :)

Always
~M~

Many can relate to the lost opportunities. Lovely poem M

Thanks Tim for being a name I see regularly in my comment section :)
I’m smilin!

Always
~M~

I appreciate you sharing your time and thoughts with me!
Thank you very much

Always
~M

If love how you tied the theme together so perfectly..

My heartfelt thanks for your kind words here :)

Always
Justafan
~M~

Ok, this is the first time I actually post a critique....
First of all, your first two paragraphs hit the nail on the head for me...boom...it resonates...I am touched...you did it for me!
It also gives plenty of space for me to imagine, feel, invision and interpret. There is a sweet sadness, longing, romance, ending and yet eternity.

The following paragraphs to me are too much. The minimalist would rather do without.
This of course is my subjective experience. Also, in the context of trying to relate this to one of your characters, whom I don't know, you maybe meant to give more information/ explanation. I am just saying it from the perspective of what I like in a poem.
All this keeping in mind that I am hardly an expert on poetry.

Thank you for the first two paragraphs

BTW I took your review to heart and made your suggested changes:) Thank you again!

~M~

I admire your honesty!

So, if this is your first critique, (which I appreciate) then what exactly is it you leave on others work?
My writing partner on the book chapters I’ve posted here ...asked me to write a poem on what the character in the book (Misty) which was written from my POV. How she felt about being left behind!
He, by the way, wanted it a lot darker. :) I’m a softy so dark is hard for me but I’m working on it!

Thank you again for the spot on R&R.

Always
Justafan of the written word

I have so far given only positive feedback and stayed away from critiquing....partly because I am new to poetry and feel I need to get the gist of it before I start talking. Then I noticed that pretty much everybody just gives positive feedback, which is good for encouragement but sometimes it needs more. You where asking for honest critique, meaning you want to know if it can be improved. I am not into pushing people hard, but there was the whole peom in the first two paragraphs and I just had to tell you less is more. I have read some owesome poems, only one paragraph long in this forum. I love it when someone moves me with least efford. I would like to learn that myself. Then I see a poem, which has the potential but gets cluttered and I want to say....stop....it's already done. So I did this time. Thank you for recieving my critique gracefully.

Always
:)

I don't think you need the middle two...  

'I weep for all the passion  

Never shared' lines.

It's a nice poem otherwise, Missy.  ;-)

Thank you :)
Made the changes you suggested.

~M~

lovely

Thank you so much :)

Always
Justafan

An 'It could have been me' song at sexual level. Thought of rhyming summary:

"So hauntingly
Could have been me
With your body."

"in my wantonness" ... hmmm ... beautifully put