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rawr people
boys can be very stupid
not your perfect cupid
but its not like girls are better
taking the piss out your ketter
being bitchy always do
when you turn round say something they dont have a clue
always taking the piss out of you
being annoying is what they do
not your perfect cupid
but its not like girls are better
taking the piss out your ketter
being bitchy always do
when you turn round say something they dont have a clue
always taking the piss out of you
being annoying is what they do
Published 13th Oct 2011
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13th Oct 2011 8:26pm
yh people get you down but dont take any notice just walk away cause ive had enough with these silly bitches
13th Oct 2011 10:27pm
...when you only have the courage for friendly feedback. There is little here that the reader can get excited about...you haven't told us enough for us to feel anything, and the writing/rhyme is too weak for us to get excited about that either.
You need to work out who you are writing for, you or the reader, and if you decide to write for the reader, then work a little harder for us.
H.
You need to work out who you are writing for, you or the reader, and if you decide to write for the reader, then work a little harder for us.
H.
14th Oct 2011 3:34pm
a good try but some of it doesn't make sense go on rhymezone.com to help you
