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Wings
I am running to you in white
with my long hair flying behind
which riding early summer wind
like angel’s thousand wings
Run until sweat drenched my thighs
and the white gown stuck to my breast lines
Run until my raven hair breaks through
my portrait frame of this life
that you have sketched for me to dive
I promise to abide
You must have known my thoughts
through the radiating perpetual scent
even though I speak in a foreign accent
You are standing in the hallway of light
so lovely bright with a sunny smile
Your halo brightens the brooding twilight
and you never hide or lie
When you open longing arms for my fame
calling Jas. of my nickname
I know I am a falling flame
dropping into the swirl of a loving dam
I am growing longing mane
as your wish, my man
up to the length till my hips
for you to kiss from your lips
Running to satisfy your desire
You will see the waves swaying fire
Run, run for your love
by angel’s thousand wings
I am riding early summer wind
till the territory of your dream
with my long hair flying behind
which riding early summer wind
like angel’s thousand wings
Run until sweat drenched my thighs
and the white gown stuck to my breast lines
Run until my raven hair breaks through
my portrait frame of this life
that you have sketched for me to dive
I promise to abide
You must have known my thoughts
through the radiating perpetual scent
even though I speak in a foreign accent
You are standing in the hallway of light
so lovely bright with a sunny smile
Your halo brightens the brooding twilight
and you never hide or lie
When you open longing arms for my fame
calling Jas. of my nickname
I know I am a falling flame
dropping into the swirl of a loving dam
I am growing longing mane
as your wish, my man
up to the length till my hips
for you to kiss from your lips
Running to satisfy your desire
You will see the waves swaying fire
Run, run for your love
by angel’s thousand wings
I am riding early summer wind
till the territory of your dream
Author's Note
Inspired by Marielle's "I Suggest You Run"
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re: Re. Wings
23rd Apr 2018 5:45pm
Dear Tim, glad you feel that such...Guess you love black long hair too :)
love
Jas
love
Jas
Re. Wings
23rd Apr 2018 5:55pm
Your opening stanza establishes a strong visual image, which is effective. Your second stanza holds a metaphor I find interesting, breaking through the portrait frame. The way I think of it, it is a reminder that life itself defies all convenient cages of definition, it flows free and boundless. I enjoy how you introduce this other in your third stanza and its closing line is endearing. It's great how your final stanza mirrors the first, I am told it is called an envelope poem. Beautifully expressed love here, RJ.
Daniel
Daniel
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Re: Re. Wings
23rd Apr 2018 6:11pm
Dear Daniel, guess how much I appreciate your commentsera? You are such an observant commentator. Love your words.
Thank you so much for the possitive and nice feedback :)
love
Jas
Thank you so much for the possitive and nice feedback :)
love
Jas
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23rd Apr 2018 6:20pm
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23rd Apr 2018 6:43pm
Dear Peace, feeling so nice to have your read and kind words. And glad to have you around...it's my honor to get your RL add.
with so much love
Jas
with so much love
Jas
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23rd Apr 2018 7:53pm
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24th Apr 2018 1:57am
Thank you so much for the thought dear Lawrence.
Glad you thought it's "really excellent verse".
love
Jas
Glad you thought it's "really excellent verse".
love
Jas
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I really love this so much..you are such a wordsmith....now any thought you have can be poetically shaped for display...as you probably speak in poetic feelings now...and everyone around you is blessed for it
love
Jeff
love
Jeff
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Re: Re. Wings
24th Apr 2018 7:13pm
Thank you so much my dear Jeff. For those words I have to thank you for the inspiration.
Glad you love it. It's my honor to have your compliments as such.
Love you always
Jas
Glad you love it. It's my honor to have your compliments as such.
Love you always
Jas
Re. Wings
24th Apr 2018 6:51pm
Wonderful imagery in that first stanza
"riding early summer wind
like angel’s thousand wings "- i always love angels and demons verse if done well.
"sweat drenched my thighs
and the white gown stuck to my breast lines"- well this got erotic fast lol.
the scent lingering in the air,the aspect of accent (foreign accents always drive me crazy in the best way in women).
" the waves swaying fire"
that fifth stanza makes me want to say "kiss ed with your hips" so bad lol.
great love poem
"riding early summer wind
like angel’s thousand wings "- i always love angels and demons verse if done well.
"sweat drenched my thighs
and the white gown stuck to my breast lines"- well this got erotic fast lol.
the scent lingering in the air,the aspect of accent (foreign accents always drive me crazy in the best way in women).
" the waves swaying fire"
that fifth stanza makes me want to say "kiss ed with your hips" so bad lol.
great love poem
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Re: Re. Wings
24th Apr 2018 7:08pm
Oh my dear Samael, your comment made me laugh so bad...
Well you could kiss with my hips if you want to....
I guess my accent would drive you crazier lol...oh you are so funny...you have made my boring life more thrilling...
Thank you so much for those crazy thoughts. Always love your visit.
love
Jas
Well you could kiss with my hips if you want to....
I guess my accent would drive you crazier lol...oh you are so funny...you have made my boring life more thrilling...
Thank you so much for those crazy thoughts. Always love your visit.
love
Jas
Re. Wings
26th Apr 2018 2:18am
Oh my dear ... the imagery in this is spectacular ... the contrast of black hair and white gown ... breathtaking ... one of your best poems yet
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26th Apr 2018 8:26am
Oh my dear DragonFly, your read means a lot to me....it's my honor to get your RL add.
Thank you so much.
love
Jas
Thank you so much.
love
Jas
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Anonymous
28th Apr 2018 3:23am
Hey Rose.......what a great ink this is......very visual.......very beautiful in white you are with your long flowing hair.......well deserved of a halo and Angle wings.......enjoyed this much......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. Wings
28th Apr 2018 3:39am
Thank you my dear Flowergirl for the nice feedback. Glad to have your read. I so much cherish your words.
love always
Jasmine
love always
Jasmine
Re. Wings
28th Apr 2018 3:54pm
dear Taiwanese poet ...
u have flown well above the clouds ...we read then
I see I am on ur poets list
you compose love poetry
I still help gals and guys go back and forth
they all love my motions and emotions
love is a sacred word I thought
none on DUP knew
but it appears
young poetess
you do
keep the flow
all will know what love is
many think nothing of it
but LUST
'TIS it
well done young one
my life is now almost done!!!!
u have flown well above the clouds ...we read then
I see I am on ur poets list
you compose love poetry
I still help gals and guys go back and forth
they all love my motions and emotions
love is a sacred word I thought
none on DUP knew
but it appears
young poetess
you do
keep the flow
all will know what love is
many think nothing of it
but LUST
'TIS it
well done young one
my life is now almost done!!!!
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Re: Re. Wings
28th Apr 2018 5:37pm
Thank you dear Again for the nice comment. Always appreciate your visit.
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
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28th Apr 2018 6:14pm
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29th Apr 2018 10:34pm
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Re. Wings
1st May 2018 4:44pm
"Your hallo brightens the brooding twilight
and you never hide or lie "
A portrait in one line!
and you never hide or lie "
A portrait in one line!
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Re: Re. Wings
1st May 2018 5:04pm
Hey TIG, glad to have your read. Thank you so much for stopping by and sharing your thought.
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
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you are standing in the hallway of light- so lovely “
i deeply love this poem, it took me somewhere in a dream so truly beautiful and it is like a dance you have written . so touched i could inspire such a beautiful poem of yours. love always , marielle
i deeply love this poem, it took me somewhere in a dream so truly beautiful and it is like a dance you have written . so touched i could inspire such a beautiful poem of yours. love always , marielle
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Re: Re. Wings
2nd May 2018 7:33am
My dear Marielle, you truly inspired me. Glad you love it.
Thank you so much for the inspiration.
love
Jas
Thank you so much for the inspiration.
love
Jas