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Wear Me Out
This morning
through the reflection of the mirror
I saw my self’s weary looks
a would-be acute bloodhound
with droopy eyes and floppy ears
For the past few weeks
I have been staggering
out of my comfort zone
and taking on a new challenge
Trying to pole-vault
hope to jump over the air particles
regardless of the higher heat
the friction would dry me out
Soaking In limbo gloom with purge fire
been crashed and burned
Out of the count
my open mouth can’t speak
my worn-out body can’t give a hug
I am savoring the feeling of exhaustion
sitting numb and dumb
no way to bear the weight of a pen
Feeling so close
a haggard rose
the saggy petals can’t carry dew drops
even the slightest dose
I’m still breathing
inhaling the spell ray of collapsing
not sure how much I can reach
but I have been moving forward
at least a few more further inches
through the reflection of the mirror
I saw my self’s weary looks
a would-be acute bloodhound
with droopy eyes and floppy ears
For the past few weeks
I have been staggering
out of my comfort zone
and taking on a new challenge
Trying to pole-vault
hope to jump over the air particles
regardless of the higher heat
the friction would dry me out
Soaking In limbo gloom with purge fire
been crashed and burned
Out of the count
my open mouth can’t speak
my worn-out body can’t give a hug
I am savoring the feeling of exhaustion
sitting numb and dumb
no way to bear the weight of a pen
Feeling so close
a haggard rose
the saggy petals can’t carry dew drops
even the slightest dose
I’m still breathing
inhaling the spell ray of collapsing
not sure how much I can reach
but I have been moving forward
at least a few more further inches
Author's Note
I am starting a new career and feeling exhausted. Hope I am stronge enough to take on the challenge. (Image is from Youtube)
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Re. Wear Me Out
3rd Apr 2018 6:23pm
You are strong and it will get easier everyday. I like the pole vault metaphor.
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3rd Apr 2018 6:28pm
Do you like the dog image dear Tim?
Thank you so much for the encouragement.
much love
RoseJasmine
Thank you so much for the encouragement.
much love
RoseJasmine
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3rd Apr 2018 6:26pm
Its all about going out there and doing what you want to do
If you try facing your fears, no one can judge you
Keep moving, keep swinging do not stop at your Blues
I wish you all the luck for this new endeavor, Hope is what eventually sails us through.
If you try facing your fears, no one can judge you
Keep moving, keep swinging do not stop at your Blues
I wish you all the luck for this new endeavor, Hope is what eventually sails us through.
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Re: Re. Wear Me Out
3rd Apr 2018 6:49pm
Thank you SaWai for the kind words. They are so encouraging.
I will fight for myself as what you do :)))
love
RoseJasmine
I will fight for myself as what you do :)))
love
RoseJasmine
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5th Apr 2018 9:49am
Re. Wear Me Out
3rd Apr 2018 6:34pm
You are such a strong woman, change is good and sometimes being active out there is just what we need. I loved the honesty in this poem and your ability to paint this picture so well of you vaulting . I wish I could start a new career one day it is extremly brave and a rebirthing for someone
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Re: Re. Wear Me Out
3rd Apr 2018 6:54pm
Thank you my dear Marielle.
I believe things will be getting better and better.
I believe you can do it as well.
This is all about life I guess.
much love
RoseJasmine
I believe things will be getting better and better.
I believe you can do it as well.
This is all about life I guess.
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. Wear Me Out
3rd Apr 2018 8:12pm
The word dog tired comes to mind.
i like the second stanzas pole vaulting imagery.
the third stanzas purge fire
"no way to bear the weight of a pen"- i feel the same way some days and just try to take a step back and breathe in fresh air away from thought sometimes.
inhaling petals and dew drops - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jbpBdmXiceM
excellent poem RoseJasmine, i wish you all the best luck with your new career and hope it to be worth the trial and tribulations.
i like the second stanzas pole vaulting imagery.
the third stanzas purge fire
"no way to bear the weight of a pen"- i feel the same way some days and just try to take a step back and breathe in fresh air away from thought sometimes.
inhaling petals and dew drops - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jbpBdmXiceM
excellent poem RoseJasmine, i wish you all the best luck with your new career and hope it to be worth the trial and tribulations.
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Re: Re. Wear Me Out
4th Apr 2018 2:56am
Dear Samael, dog tired is what I wanted to say lol.
I love the flower singing in the wonderland. It made me cheerful. Thank you my friend.
Good to know I am not alone. I believe you have conquered the situation well because you have stepped forward on writing. I can feel something different in your poems.
Thank you so much for the solace.
much love
RoseJasmine
I love the flower singing in the wonderland. It made me cheerful. Thank you my friend.
Good to know I am not alone. I believe you have conquered the situation well because you have stepped forward on writing. I can feel something different in your poems.
Thank you so much for the solace.
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. Wear Me Out
3rd Apr 2018 8:23pm
"Too exhausted to hug?" that is a dire situation indeed. And "No way to bear the weight of a pen." These are my favorite lines. I have felt the same way due to depression. The vulnerability in this piece is palpable. Wonderfully written, Rose. Brava!
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Dear Gahddess, good and bad to know you have had the same situation.
"good" means you know my feelings. "bad" means I feel sorry for the thing happening to you.
Work changing is always a challenge, but it could very possibly occur. Therefore, we have to move forward and take it.
Hope you are feeling better now.
much love
RoseJasmine
"good" means you know my feelings. "bad" means I feel sorry for the thing happening to you.
Work changing is always a challenge, but it could very possibly occur. Therefore, we have to move forward and take it.
Hope you are feeling better now.
much love
RoseJasmine
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4th Apr 2018 4:52am
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Re: Re. Wear Me Out
4th Apr 2018 3:37am
Thank you John for the kind words.
Glad you felt the strength of my resolve. Yeah, it's a brave desicision to make, and I am glad I did it. Hope things will work out well.
Glad to have your visit again.
much love
RoseJasmine
Glad you felt the strength of my resolve. Yeah, it's a brave desicision to make, and I am glad I did it. Hope things will work out well.
Glad to have your visit again.
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. Wear Me Out
4th Apr 2018 2:23am
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Spaniels are cute for cuddling, but I am more of a hound for fighting I think.
Glad I have passed the most difficult step, but there are still a lot at the front...
Thank you Lawrence for the nice feedback.
much love
RoseJasmine
Glad I have passed the most difficult step, but there are still a lot at the front...
Thank you Lawrence for the nice feedback.
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. Wear Me Out
4th Apr 2018 4:31am
"the friction would dry me out
Soaking In limbo gloom with purge fire
been crashed and burned
Out of the count
my open mouth can’t speak"
Jasmine this is wonderful phrasing ...I just love the abstract mingled with straight looking details...
love always
Jeff
Soaking In limbo gloom with purge fire
been crashed and burned
Out of the count
my open mouth can’t speak"
Jasmine this is wonderful phrasing ...I just love the abstract mingled with straight looking details...
love always
Jeff
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Re: Re. Wear Me Out
4th Apr 2018 4:56am
Thank you my dear Jaff for the positive feedback for the poem itself.
I am afraid it's being too straight and losing its beauty as a poem. But whatever it's showing my true feelings.
Glad you like it.
much lvoe
RoseJasmine
I am afraid it's being too straight and losing its beauty as a poem. But whatever it's showing my true feelings.
Glad you like it.
much lvoe
RoseJasmine
Re: Re. Wear Me Out
4th Apr 2018 5:37pm
well...people see the poem different...I see nothing wrong with it...I think it flows very well...and is interesting and honest
Jeff
Jeff
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5th Apr 2018 4:33am
Re. Wear Me Out
4th Apr 2018 9:42pm
Hang in there my rose from the East ... I feel warm breezes coming your way. Great write, my poetess.
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Re: Re. Wear Me Out
5th Apr 2018 4:39am
I can still send warm breezes my friend :)
I will work harder and never give up :)
Thank you my LilDragon for the encouragement.
much love
RoseJasmine
I will work harder and never give up :)
Thank you my LilDragon for the encouragement.
much love
RoseJasmine
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7th Apr 2018 5:09pm
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8th Apr 2018 2:10am
Hey TIG, nice to meet you here. Thank you for telling me you felt a sense of satisfaction. Your visit is a pleasure for me.
love
RoseJasmine
love
RoseJasmine
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Re: Re. Wear Me Out
9th Apr 2018 3:52pm
Oh dear Hans, glad to have your visit. How have you been recenty?
What do you feel like in the morning?
Everything is more and more organized day by day I feel.
Thank you so much for the encouragement.
much love
RoseJasmine
What do you feel like in the morning?
Everything is more and more organized day by day I feel.
Thank you so much for the encouragement.
much love
RoseJasmine
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Re: Re. Wear Me Out
9th Apr 2018 4:01pm
Thank you Danny. Your mature thought has encouraged me. I believe things are getting better and better....
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine