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i suggest you run
i suggest you run
run for the hills
of your wild life
driven in you
run
until it takes all your breaths away
run
until your heart screams out of your chest
until your legs can barely hold the weight of your aspirations..
i suggest you run,
run till you trip
and if you fall,
scramble to get back to stance,
i
suggest
you
run
until every ounce of you is leaked from your body
every memory of your past is driven from your sweat
i suggest you run,
until your feet bleed
until you cannot see
i
suggest
you
run..
towards the light..
run for your life .
i suggest you run,
with the fire singing in your heart
run for yourself
run for love
so go on
move on
and
run
run for the hills
of your wild life
driven in you
run
until it takes all your breaths away
run
until your heart screams out of your chest
until your legs can barely hold the weight of your aspirations..
i suggest you run,
run till you trip
and if you fall,
scramble to get back to stance,
i
suggest
you
run
until every ounce of you is leaked from your body
every memory of your past is driven from your sweat
i suggest you run,
until your feet bleed
until you cannot see
i
suggest
you
run..
towards the light..
run for your life .
i suggest you run,
with the fire singing in your heart
run for yourself
run for love
so go on
move on
and
run
Author's Note
edited a poem from six years ago. I haven't written anything new in a month so I edited this today, any feedback is appreciated
inspired by myself believing there was an angelic being whispering to me in a time of my life to move on , and run towards something new
inspired by myself believing there was an angelic being whispering to me in a time of my life to move on , and run towards something new
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Re. i suggest you run
9th Mar 2018 11:38pm
I appreciate the urgency. "An angelic being whispering"...I myself have had an experience eerily similar. The catalyst for my courage. In screenwriting they call this an Inciting Incident.
"The fire singing in your heart." Yes, indeed.
"The fire singing in your heart." Yes, indeed.
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Re: Re. i suggest you run
10th Mar 2018 4:12am
Thank you so very much. Most often i need such a catalyst to bring out tje courage inside
Re. i suggest you run
10th Mar 2018 00:44am
I know all too well the desperation & urge that gave your feet & soul wings to fly. When you hear that inner whisper weather it be an angel, God or someone from within, take heed & run. I gained a lot of inspiration from this piece and a bouquet of respect for the urgency you detailed so vehemently. Loved it. Sincerely,
Shadow_Dancer
Shadow_Dancer
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Re: Re. i suggest you run
10th Mar 2018 4:14am
Thank you. I am deeply touched by your comment. I am honored it is on your reading list
So truly happy to be able to inspire another. Love marielle
So truly happy to be able to inspire another. Love marielle
Re: Re. i suggest you run
All thanx is yours after all you created this jewel & indeed inspiried I am. Sincerely,
Shadow
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Re. i suggest you run
Anonymous
10th Mar 2018 3:05am
Marielle.. such a powerful ink.. brilliantly written.. into my list it goes.. much respect..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. i suggest you run
10th Mar 2018 4:16am
Thank you dear diamond , always honored to be on your list
I appreciate that you appreciated my poem. May we all be able to run when our calling heeds
I appreciate that you appreciated my poem. May we all be able to run when our calling heeds
Re. i suggest you run
10th Mar 2018 8:13am
a very good suggestion
to cowardly men
who do and then run
faster the better
before they get the batter
well done teach all such guys a lesson
let em runnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
to cowardly men
who do and then run
faster the better
before they get the batter
well done teach all such guys a lesson
let em runnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
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Re. i suggest you run
10th Mar 2018 2:16pm
Love this one as both a poet and a runner. Like the imagery of this with this ample spacing ... almost limitless. Very inspiring thing to read upon returning from my jog. Bravo poetess
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Re: Re. i suggest you run
12th Mar 2018 1:16am
Re. i suggest you run
10th Mar 2018 2:25pm
Re: Re. i suggest you run
12th Mar 2018 1:16am
Re. i suggest you run
22nd Mar 2018 5:04pm
Dear Marelle, ah this is so good, so powerful. I love every word here. You wrote it in a very natural and straightforward way to give the strength.
"run for the hills
of your wild life
driven in you"
"until your heart screams out of your chest
until your legs can barely hold the weight of your aspirations.."
I will run in the gym until I drench my clothes.
"run till you trip
and if you fall,
scramble to get back to stance"
"until every ounce of you is leaked from your body
every memory of your past is driven from your sweat"
" with the fire singing in your heart
run for yourself
run for love "
I love running wildly like a rabbit...I will run in the gym until I am drenched and like dying...
This is just incredibly good. Love love this.
much love
RoseJasmine
"run for the hills
of your wild life
driven in you"
"until your heart screams out of your chest
until your legs can barely hold the weight of your aspirations.."
I will run in the gym until I drench my clothes.
"run till you trip
and if you fall,
scramble to get back to stance"
"until every ounce of you is leaked from your body
every memory of your past is driven from your sweat"
" with the fire singing in your heart
run for yourself
run for love "
I love running wildly like a rabbit...I will run in the gym until I am drenched and like dying...
This is just incredibly good. Love love this.
much love
RoseJasmine
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Re: Re. i suggest you run
23rd Mar 2018 9:16pm
thank you love
i am so touched you enjoyed my piece
this was from many years ago written in a prose
and i changed it to a poem recently
:):)<3
i am so touched you enjoyed my piece
this was from many years ago written in a prose
and i changed it to a poem recently
:):)<3