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Your writes..
Eta Carinae
.. are like cosmos
Enveloping
My planets
I am direct and
Vulgar
You are intricacy
Lost
On me
Perspective undergoes an
Essential
Paradigm shift
You close your
Womb
About me
Lovingly
I appreciate you
I am an
Animal
Constructed of
Raw
Element
My breath of steam
Of
Need
My mouth is
Greed
And
Earth
My
Words are
Destructions and
Births
I ache and scream my
Triumphant
Deaths
In so embracing
Conquering
I am in peace
Awakening
Slumbering in
War
I appreciate your
Gentle
Caress
You soothe this
Beast
I am
In wailing plasmatic
Implosion I
Drink of
Everything
At once
So that I may
Burst
Apart and new
Life
May
Spring
Forth
I am a meteoric
Fire
Trail
Consumed in your
Wet
Breaths
My spirit is
Flame
That circles
My heart
Guarding the
Crisis
Core
Lightning
Zig
Zags
Across my brow in
Ungoverned
Power
When I drink you
In
I am
Overfilled
You spill over and
Douse me
You are ancient
I
Ache to
Destroy and
Rebirth
You
This is my animal
Desire
Tempered by
What grace
I am
Afforded in
Sentience
We orbit
Each other
Our gravity wells
Collide
I
Ignite
You
Are shorn
Give way
Create a cavity
To hold me
With
Aching
Sighs
Of resignation
Though I am
Sharply
Vectored
Phallic in
Dynamic
Destination
Arrowed
Hound
Flaming
Bird of
Continual
Rebirths
I am
Blunt
Physics
Occam's
Razor
I pause
To
Appreciate
You
Brilliant
Megacosm
Erudite
Dimensions of
Awareness
Enclosed in
Womanly
Flesh
And unfathomable
Depths of
Feeling
I am
And
Remain
Eclipsed
By a greater spirit
Sincerely,
R Scuptoris
.. are like cosmos
Enveloping
My planets
I am direct and
Vulgar
You are intricacy
Lost
On me
Perspective undergoes an
Essential
Paradigm shift
You close your
Womb
About me
Lovingly
I appreciate you
I am an
Animal
Constructed of
Raw
Element
My breath of steam
Of
Need
My mouth is
Greed
And
Earth
My
Words are
Destructions and
Births
I ache and scream my
Triumphant
Deaths
In so embracing
Conquering
I am in peace
Awakening
Slumbering in
War
I appreciate your
Gentle
Caress
You soothe this
Beast
I am
In wailing plasmatic
Implosion I
Drink of
Everything
At once
So that I may
Burst
Apart and new
Life
May
Spring
Forth
I am a meteoric
Fire
Trail
Consumed in your
Wet
Breaths
My spirit is
Flame
That circles
My heart
Guarding the
Crisis
Core
Lightning
Zig
Zags
Across my brow in
Ungoverned
Power
When I drink you
In
I am
Overfilled
You spill over and
Douse me
You are ancient
I
Ache to
Destroy and
Rebirth
You
This is my animal
Desire
Tempered by
What grace
I am
Afforded in
Sentience
We orbit
Each other
Our gravity wells
Collide
I
Ignite
You
Are shorn
Give way
Create a cavity
To hold me
With
Aching
Sighs
Of resignation
Though I am
Sharply
Vectored
Phallic in
Dynamic
Destination
Arrowed
Hound
Flaming
Bird of
Continual
Rebirths
I am
Blunt
Physics
Occam's
Razor
I pause
To
Appreciate
You
Brilliant
Megacosm
Erudite
Dimensions of
Awareness
Enclosed in
Womanly
Flesh
And unfathomable
Depths of
Feeling
I am
And
Remain
Eclipsed
By a greater spirit
Sincerely,
R Scuptoris
Written by
DanielChristensen
(The Fire Elemental)
Published 3rd Mar 2018
| Edited 21st Apr 2019
Author's Note
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Anonymous
3rd Mar 2018 8:34pm
what a rare kind of beautiful!
speechless and sound
speechless and sound
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Anonymous
4th Mar 2018 9:49pm
I have to say you are one of my most favourite recent discoveries. This piece is just no exception. There’s something so vulnerable about the piece as a whole. It’s almost like you feel you are not good
enough for the object of your affections.
The way the whole poem is laid out is almost like little breaths, individual cataclysms colliding with the air as they leave you.
Just beautiful really. I think I can whole heartedly say there’s nothing about this piece I dislike.
Thank you for sharing.
enough for the object of your affections.
The way the whole poem is laid out is almost like little breaths, individual cataclysms colliding with the air as they leave you.
Just beautiful really. I think I can whole heartedly say there’s nothing about this piece I dislike.
Thank you for sharing.
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6th Mar 2018 2:36am
Thank you. My writes are often prosaic, unsophisticated, it has always been my nature to just to pour from heart, which I consider one of my great strengths. It takes various forms, sometimes tender, sometimes more forceful. She's someone who's been kind to me as I'm moving through a rough patch. My moods are up and down lately so my works are probably reflecting that. I really appreciate that you liked the piece. :)
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4th Mar 2018 10:38pm
I've only recently joined this group after writing for quite a long time, but sporadically and with no proper purpose. To read something as cleverly structured as this, so eloquently written and flowing, makes me realise I still have so much more growth and room for exploration in my writing style. Thanks for sharing.
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6th Mar 2018 2:55am
I'm so glad you like it. I really didn't put a lot of thought into the construction, but I have been ripping my heart out and throwing it at the page for a couple decades, so there must be some inherent skill by now. lol Thank you. I hope you will enjoy your time here. Plenty of really amazing ink flying around and it comes in more flavors than Baskin Robbins.
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Anonymous
5th Mar 2018 3:05am
Hey Daniel.......this is out of this world.......abasolutly brilliant ink.......luv it......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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6th Mar 2018 2:57am
Haha thanks I am glad you enjoyed it. I figured out how to make my recording space a little more sound proof, which cuts down on the background noise. Always nice to make improvements.
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6th Mar 2018 2:58am
You are always so good to me Melia. *hugs* It's great you are feeling my writes. Miss talking to you. Feel free to message me here anytime.
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Anonymous
6th Mar 2018 1:42pm
Such tender breaths you have breathed on to the page here. There is such beautiful purity in this, like it's leaked straight form the heart.
A love to behold.
A love to behold.
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8th Mar 2018 7:43pm
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Anonymous
13th Mar 2018 2:22pm
You describe attraction and love so beautifully in this piece. Breathtaking to read and so fluid. An absolute joy to the eyes and imagination
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13th Mar 2018 4:58pm
You honor me. I appreciate your time invested in my works and especially that they have moved you. Namaste.
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16th Mar 2018 2:52am
dearest Daniel so cosmically and spiritually seductive
I felt caressed and calmed by this write..
thank you..
love Brenda
I felt caressed and calmed by this write..
thank you..
love Brenda
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17th Mar 2018 4:15am
Hello Brenda. :)
I've seen you around but I don't know that we've spoken before. If we have I apologize. I at times suffer with insomnia or in my bipolar disorder I lose my goddamn mind, which is sometimes dystopian and horrific and sometimes sublime and horrific. lol
I'm glad you felt me in this piece. I try to scrape the barrel of my truth every time I write.
I've seen you around but I don't know that we've spoken before. If we have I apologize. I at times suffer with insomnia or in my bipolar disorder I lose my goddamn mind, which is sometimes dystopian and horrific and sometimes sublime and horrific. lol
I'm glad you felt me in this piece. I try to scrape the barrel of my truth every time I write.
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Anonymous
8th May 2018 1:59am
Your style is like a volcano, yet each word a succinct poem in verses verticular. (my way of saying vertical poetry.. can't find it in dictionary that I can see, haha)
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9th May 2018 10:44pm
I often feel just that word when I write and recite - volcanic. Thank you for feeling me in this. :)
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Anonymous
10th May 2018 3:49am
You're welcome, quite rightly! (Thinking Donovan song, inserted here ha)
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20th Apr 2019 4:18am
To me this was about so much more than attraction: about discovering your being through an attraction. It's rare to have an attraction that you can relate directly to cosmic proportions and see yourselves as stars in, you captured that so well here. The experience of destruction and rebirth is one I'll never tire of reading.
I don't want to make assumptions, but I also felt, especially in this piece, one can get a sense of what it is like to be you.
"In wailing plasmatic
Implosion I
Drink of
Everything
At once
So that I may
Burst
Apart and new
Life
May
Spring
Forth"
particularly stuck with me.
I don't want to make assumptions, but I also felt, especially in this piece, one can get a sense of what it is like to be you.
"In wailing plasmatic
Implosion I
Drink of
Everything
At once
So that I may
Burst
Apart and new
Life
May
Spring
Forth"
particularly stuck with me.
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20th Apr 2019 5:27pm
Thank you. It's meaningful to me that the depth of the write spoke to you and a keystone of it's message that we find ourselves in finding others.
I've found that we have our times together, however long or brief, but love is never lost,it is ever present and takes new forms. 🙏
I've found that we have our times together, however long or brief, but love is never lost,it is ever present and takes new forms. 🙏
Anonymous
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8th Feb 2020 9:09pm
Thank you SST I really appreciate it brother. I would say perhaps either Ataru or This Soulless Metropolis are where I get the most personal, but I can see what you mean. It takes courage to reach out in love to another, It's a leap of faith. 💖
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8th Feb 2020 8:33pm
This is killer gold, Daniel. Killer, killer, killer levels of glory. Thanks for the reading.
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8th Feb 2020 9:10pm
Thank you I really appreciate it. :) It's so cool that you took the time to look back to an older write and give it new life. 💖
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8th Feb 2020 9:20pm
I followed Sunsettowns reading list...which is clearly an amazing thing. Well done again.
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8th Feb 2020 11:04pm
Today i read this poem 2 times for a new one to grow. Thanks for the inspiration.
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10th Feb 2020 2:48am