...But I've Only Been To L.A Once

i' from Nor Cali never cared for so cal...captured it smashingly

I freaking HATED L.A! I can't speak for the rest of Cali, as the only other time I ever traveled down there, I was 7 in San Diego and was merely infatuated with the zoo and chocolate shops.

Thank you very much haha! So sorry about your displeasure on the area, but I sympathize, I was not impressed 😆

First went to L.A. in early 70's, sky was orange from pollution. Your stunning piece does the place justice.

Very nice.

David

And it's still that way, with tons of dust and grime 😆

Thank you David :)

stellar freaking write beautiful Atomik
I can attest to how the place makes you chest tight
with difficulty breathing..

killer imagery and effect..

love Brenda

So glad I hit the right nerve! Thank you tons Brenda <3

Atomik, it is a real pleasure to read your work written with a unique flare, your signature style. The one reminds me of the terrible fires in California last year. I am from San Jose and my grandma and grandpa used to live in Santa Rosa so I was extra sad. I know your words had probably a different meaning but that you for the think. Bravisima!

Oh no...I'm so, so sorry :( That was an awful thing that I hope doesn't get repeated. I live up in WA, and the eastern side of the state had some bad fires as well. I pray it stays unlit this summer.

I think I wrote a thing or two back then, I actually remember joining this site and submitting stuff inside the stuffy house because the air outside most of August was burnt.

Anyway, thank you very much!

Now I've been there!

It's quite the place!

I didn't actually hate everything there was to do down there, but it was super expensive too, so it was an extra bummer. I hope I didn't demonize the whole place, there was a healthy amount of poetic liberty here 😆

Never been to LA; however, San Fran was intimidating to me. I swear I couldn't wait to get back over the San Andreas fault! 📈

This describes air pollution perfectly, especially the effects on organics, such as guman bodies.

Haha  I never been there...but after reading hhmm I wanna dee now....I love ur descriptive lines...so visual
Great job
Love Autumn

Thank you very much :)

I wish to go to California just to spit on it and leave lol.

great poem AtoMik

i love the gas fires crass
pocket lighters making sport  

sienna makes me feel like it's ok to die in the desert
"horse with no name" and all that jazz.
maybe get drunk but not fall in the fire while i'm dancing,
hang out with the Indians.say "i'm part Indian ya know" like every other white person does in America lol.

besmirching...hmmmm. all of our reputations are falling rainwater,just passing through. this makes me think of people being better than other people and how we're all full of shit hahaha. that made me happy, let us level the playing field for the little people,i'm meaning common folk not midgets lol.

sternum- i'll never not think of popping cherries like sternums after that one poem.and so this word will forever make me happy.
i enjoy the idea of uncontrolled movement,unless it's like a face twitch from that medicine you took a week ago that does not appear it's going to go away.

"Rise smoke-son      
shoot down      
all the sticky pants    
rancid    
smog-nosed    
sluts   " - dry ice, pre-cum, and environmentalists picketing with badly drawn planet earths drawn on paperboard; sneaky bastards.

"Adobe earlobes    
absorb      
torchlight sunsets" - this makes me really want to buy an earthship to live in. i've been dreaming of getting one of those since 9th grade science class. i hear what you're saying, these flames of the west are not all they're hyped up to be,brioche bun botanical gardens.  

"sconce rays skate    
through your gauges...    
gashes that cast    
charms on me    
    
and it isn't yet dark"  
                    -cheap hotel lamps are all i could afford. roller blade rough house girl gangs,chains,broken bottles,pedal to the metal hot rod throttles. enchantress,hexing,command me into the sea. i could really use a day on the sand, the beach right about now.any beach, just not California lol.

let the sun set on the gas light district,the zoo's, aquatic centers,melancholy miners in motel rooms making chatter noises the vampires do (manifest destiny down Ventura boulevard as Tom Petty told me when i was young).

we're used tires and broken glass, selling secrets waiting to get caught; so $10.00 plug these pickup tires pulling everything from the road that sticks in the tread.

well penned AtoMik, you always turn excellent images in me.
i'd still like to go and buy an overpriced book just to say california ripped me off; maybe learn how to surf.i should probably just go watch "point break" instead lol.

Can you print out this response too? As a sort of spinoff work? Thank you so much for this comment my friend :)

Yes and I may be insane lol.

LA - like a cheap suit of a dubious colour and pattern - i'd rather go to hell and back :-)))))

fantastic write as always :-)))))))))))))))))))))))

Yes dude, EXACTLY.

Garcias senor!