Sexploration

Overall, I [really] liked this poem, it has some excellent metaphorical visuals! I do think you could make the poem stronger with some changes, though. You have great starts in here, I like the first two lines in nearly all of the stanzas, but the last line in the first two stanzas is a little weak, feels forced just a smidge.

Here's just a thought:
While I like your three-line stanzas, what if you erased the last line of each stanza except on the last stanza; on that I would erase the middle line ("I returned it seven-fold") because it just sounds a little odd...like you're keeping track--and maybe you are!--but it takes away from the sensual nature of the piece, IMHO. (I think, in general, numbers tend to cast a rather cold air on any piece.)

I hope that helps. Keep writing poetry, my friend.

Yes! I appreciate the advice. I'll try as you suggest. Thank you.

My final exams are over so I finally had time to rewrite this as you suggested. Thanks again.

Great poem, Scuba!!