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chloroform
smother my pink daisies
with chloroform
make them sleep
so they no longer weep for the sun
who fails to rise
on delicate petals
winter has raped them of their beauty
let them be at peace within wilted glory
pressed to my pages
where all secrets are kept
pink daisies
represent deep regret
pain for the woman i once was
who ran wild with the night
& charmed the stars
down from the heavens
now trapped inside my lacquer finish
highly polished
& poised
a lady stuck in the day to day
collared
& leashed to the mundane
my Master boredom
he's a cunt buster
i am his slave
calling today to the dying afternoon
witness this lady
hair wreathed in nature's finest
whose skin once looked like fresh cream
& lips tasted of sun kissed berries
now cigarette smoke halos her head
her skin weathered
lips pale from copd
wait a moment
before you dismiss her
& look deep within sparkling eyes
there her soul whispers
"i'm still in here"
no longer beautiful
but very much alive
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Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 1:23am
Wow ... this is amazing. Such imagery and power, rich and ripe metaphors. Stirs my very soul. Again I am in awe. Well done my sweet poetess, well done.
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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 10:55pm
thank you beautiful Dragonfly for a very gracious comment you brightened my day gifting me smiles lovely poetess :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 1:23am
Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 10:55pm
Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 1:41am
wait a moment
before you dismiss her
& look deep within sparkling eyes
there her soul whispers
"i'm still in here"
no longer beautiful
but very much alive
This took my breath away ... such vivid images . I remain in awe of your pen.
I, like many are so happy you are "still here," as your ink has touched so many of us
With deepest admiration
~Wicked
before you dismiss her
& look deep within sparkling eyes
there her soul whispers
"i'm still in here"
no longer beautiful
but very much alive
This took my breath away ... such vivid images . I remain in awe of your pen.
I, like many are so happy you are "still here," as your ink has touched so many of us
With deepest admiration
~Wicked
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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 10:56pm
thank you dearest Wicked One for such a beautifully gracious comment i'm beaming :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 3:39am
"wait a moment
before you dismiss her
& look deep within sparkling eyes
there her soul whispers
"i'm still in here"
no longer beautiful
but very much alive "
wonderful thoughts of this character....{speaking 4th person} certainly crims being quite stunning would need to write of some unsightly character to use this description...yes!?.....I digress but not desist in the love of your shadowy ink forms...
lovingly
Jeff
before you dismiss her
& look deep within sparkling eyes
there her soul whispers
"i'm still in here"
no longer beautiful
but very much alive "
wonderful thoughts of this character....{speaking 4th person} certainly crims being quite stunning would need to write of some unsightly character to use this description...yes!?.....I digress but not desist in the love of your shadowy ink forms...
lovingly
Jeff
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Re: Re. chloroform
thank you dearest Jeff for showing love on this write we are our own worst critic at times
& see ourselves in a harsh light
this is where this version of me sprung..
love Crim
& see ourselves in a harsh light
this is where this version of me sprung..
love Crim
Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 7:12am
Tha ending was so perfect. I hate the ideas of beauty only being on the outside. True beauty is inside. Only you can choose to hide it away. Plus, I’m sure you’re still a head turner... hehe 😁
Lately I been going through the whole “I don’t want to get old” faze. I still very much act younger (and somewhat am). The body is starting to have more pain these days through 😓
Anyway 😁 lovely poem
Lately I been going through the whole “I don’t want to get old” faze. I still very much act younger (and somewhat am). The body is starting to have more pain these days through 😓
Anyway 😁 lovely poem
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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 11:06pm
thank you dearest LK for such a loving
& beautiful comment..
don't worry too much about getting older
you will find you've gained knowledge
but are still the same person within..
love Crim
& beautiful comment..
don't worry too much about getting older
you will find you've gained knowledge
but are still the same person within..
love Crim
Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 8:01am
you are still here,
kicking ass
& writing kickass poetry.
your vulnerable side always makes for a most compelling read
xoxo
love you heaps, beautiful one
kicking ass
& writing kickass poetry.
your vulnerable side always makes for a most compelling read
xoxo
love you heaps, beautiful one
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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 11:07pm
thank you beautiful one
for such a wonderful comment
you always bring me so much joy
just seeing you here on my page :)
love you lady..
Brenda
for such a wonderful comment
you always bring me so much joy
just seeing you here on my page :)
love you lady..
Brenda
Re. chloroform
Anonymous
8th Jan 2018 9:22am
Your keyboard glistens as diamonds in a hemp sack. None of us can roll back waves of time - thou beautiful souls remain eternal.

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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 11:08pm
Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 10:05am
Crim, Plain n simple...'classic beauty'
never gets "old" remember that! :)
never gets "old" remember that! :)
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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 11:09pm
Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 12:14pm
Bringing it home like always
You're still the queen here
Don't you forget it
Like
X
You're still the queen here
Don't you forget it
Like
X
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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 11:10pm
aw thank you graciously dearest Poet
you honor me greatly touching my heart :)
love you..
Brenda
you honor me greatly touching my heart :)
love you..
Brenda
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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 11:11pm
thank you dearest John what a wonderful way you see things.. I appreciate deeply you seeing the beauty in me..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. chloroform
Anonymous
8th Jan 2018 2:32pm
"wait a moment
before you dismiss her
& look deep within sparkling eyes
there her soul whispers
"i'm still in here"
no longer beautiful
but very much alive"
My dearest Dark Angel, your soul is and always will be beautiful. And your exquisite soul will always shine through and show you to be the beauty you truly are. Inside AND out. It can't be hidden, that kind of beauty. I love you so very much
...ever your Willow
before you dismiss her
& look deep within sparkling eyes
there her soul whispers
"i'm still in here"
no longer beautiful
but very much alive"
My dearest Dark Angel, your soul is and always will be beautiful. And your exquisite soul will always shine through and show you to be the beauty you truly are. Inside AND out. It can't be hidden, that kind of beauty. I love you so very much
...ever your Willow

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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 11:13pm
thank you beautiful Willow for seeing the true beauty that is in us remains of the soul.. a wonderful reminder..
I love you..
Brenda
I love you..
Brenda
Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 9:24pm
Beautiful is in the eye of the beholder - I am the beholder and I think your beautiful :-))))))))
Huge Big bear Hugs :-))))))
Huge Big bear Hugs :-))))))
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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 11:13pm
Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 10:27pm
Well... what more do I have to say?
All the previous comments say everything that's needed to be said about your work!
Skills admired..
<3
H
All the previous comments say everything that's needed to be said about your work!
Skills admired..
<3
H
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Re: Re. chloroform
8th Jan 2018 11:14pm
Re. chloroform
9th Jan 2018 2:17am
WOW! What can one say about the power that explodes from every word in this incredible poem Brenda. Bravo!
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. chloroform
14th Jan 2018 10:19pm
thank you dearest Harry
forgive my late response
i've been a bit down..
you gifted me big smiles
with your comment :)
love Brenda
forgive my late response
i've been a bit down..
you gifted me big smiles
with your comment :)
love Brenda
Re. chloroform
9th Jan 2018 1:55pm
Delicious for my eyes
great opening line
as well as
"charmed the stars
down from the heavens"- swoon me i'm yours lol
" lips tasted of sun kissed berries"- you secrete magic all the time don't you?
eye opening and inspiring
great opening line
as well as
"charmed the stars
down from the heavens"- swoon me i'm yours lol
" lips tasted of sun kissed berries"- you secrete magic all the time don't you?
eye opening and inspiring
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Re: Re. chloroform
14th Jan 2018 10:21pm
thank you dearest Samael
I love seeing you on my pages
I smile every time :)
as for secreting magic
not all the time I have like
we all do my moments..
so happy this very personal one
got your attention..
love Crim
I love seeing you on my pages
I smile every time :)
as for secreting magic
not all the time I have like
we all do my moments..
so happy this very personal one
got your attention..
love Crim
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Re: Re. chloroform
14th Jan 2018 10:23pm
thank you beautiful Daniella the last couple of days have been rough to see your lovely face smiling on my pages really brightened my outlook..
I cherish you dear one thank you for being so beautiful..
love Brenda
I cherish you dear one thank you for being so beautiful..
love Brenda
Anonymous
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14th Jan 2018 10:51pm
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Re. chloroform
11th Jan 2018 10:37pm
I suspect there's quite a gleam in those eyes, Lady Crim. The chloroform didn't work. Even harsh experience hasn't defeated you but given you soul. It radiates in these lines.
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Re: Re. chloroform
14th Jan 2018 10:24pm
thank you dearest Sir Crow giggling at your beautiful & clever comment :)
love Crim
love Crim