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My Dearest
My dearest
We just talked, didn’t we
but how come time has become
an unbearable agony
tortures me as if I am nobody
Have you thought of me
Are the days without me still lovely
The distance, ten thousand miles
loose bonds between us
with multi-purpose reasons
For that I often wake up at midnight
no matter how many times
I can reach out arms to find our ties
no need to hide bleary eyes
I can feel free to gnaw my swollen lips
and swallow the oozing blood drips
For that I have a chance to taste
the wake-up morning heartaches
It hurts but still nice
Whimsically it seems
the stronger it tastes
the stronger our love is
The wrinkles of the blanket
telling how struggling the night was
But still my dear
I must be crazy
cause I’ve been enjoying it greatly
For that I can shout your name
just like counting my pain
whenever the solitude bangs
When the daft wind
break my soaring wings
and cast a mirage into my dream
I know Missing You is a curse
no better than white ghost bites
But still my dear
counting my pain is not in vain
For that you can be always perfect
When it’s you come to my mind
I am breathless
The fragrance after a shower
the pure white shirt you wear
the medium length wavy hair
Your crease free pants
your caress loving hands
Those images are such flawless
I want to hear yourself to tell me
not from the third person, somebody
How’s it going, my dearest
Tell me honestly
Are the days without me still lovely
We just talked, didn’t we
but how come time has become
an unbearable agony
tortures me as if I am nobody
Have you thought of me
Are the days without me still lovely
The distance, ten thousand miles
loose bonds between us
with multi-purpose reasons
For that I often wake up at midnight
no matter how many times
I can reach out arms to find our ties
no need to hide bleary eyes
I can feel free to gnaw my swollen lips
and swallow the oozing blood drips
For that I have a chance to taste
the wake-up morning heartaches
It hurts but still nice
Whimsically it seems
the stronger it tastes
the stronger our love is
The wrinkles of the blanket
telling how struggling the night was
But still my dear
I must be crazy
cause I’ve been enjoying it greatly
For that I can shout your name
just like counting my pain
whenever the solitude bangs
When the daft wind
break my soaring wings
and cast a mirage into my dream
I know Missing You is a curse
no better than white ghost bites
But still my dear
counting my pain is not in vain
For that you can be always perfect
When it’s you come to my mind
I am breathless
The fragrance after a shower
the pure white shirt you wear
the medium length wavy hair
Your crease free pants
your caress loving hands
Those images are such flawless
I want to hear yourself to tell me
not from the third person, somebody
How’s it going, my dearest
Tell me honestly
Are the days without me still lovely
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Re. My Dearest
30th Dec 2017 4:53pm
Loved it Jasmine...can feel your feelings...such lovely lips please don't make them bleed...Lawrence
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Re: Re. My Dearest
30th Dec 2017 5:05pm
Thank you Lawrence for the kind words. Just some feelings flowing so wrote them out. Glad you like it.
much love RoseJasmine
much love RoseJasmine
Re. My Dearest
30th Dec 2017 6:07pm
I can feel this so much. So eloquent and heartfelt. You brought us to that special place of pain and love. Of missing and acceptance.
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Re: Re. My Dearest
31st Dec 2017 5:15am
Thank you marielle my dear, the RL add means a lot to me. So so glad you coud feel the pain and love. Appreciate your always support.
much much love RoseJasmine
much much love RoseJasmine
Re. My Dearest
30th Dec 2017 8:26pm
"I want to hear yourself telling me
not from the third person, somebody
How’s it going, my dearest
Tell me honestly
Are the days without me still lovely"
Jas you have grown much as a writer...your pure thoughts now easily flow onto the page in poetic verse...this is a wonderful soulful piece...the yearning and pure heart longing lays on top of the page....a masterful love poem....
my dearest
-Jeff
not from the third person, somebody
How’s it going, my dearest
Tell me honestly
Are the days without me still lovely"
Jas you have grown much as a writer...your pure thoughts now easily flow onto the page in poetic verse...this is a wonderful soulful piece...the yearning and pure heart longing lays on top of the page....a masterful love poem....
my dearest
-Jeff
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Re: Re. My Dearest
31st Dec 2017 5:23am
So so glad you thought it is "a masterful love poem". Your love and support meant a lot to me.
much much love
RoseJasmine
much much love
RoseJasmine
Re. My Dearest
31st Dec 2017 4:19am
Yes very beautiful... and so sweet...
Your feelings have left me breathless
Very lovely...<33
H
Your feelings have left me breathless
Very lovely...<33
H
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Re: Re. My Dearest
31st Dec 2017 5:28am
Thank you dear H. You are such a nice reader and always give nice support. So so glad you thought it is very beautiful...your comment is very lovely too....
much much love <33
RoseJasmine
much much love <33
RoseJasmine
Re: Re. My Dearest
1st Jan 2018 2:17pm
Thank you so much for the coming back and commenting. Can I predict when you will be here. I would like to say hello to you....
much love RoseJamine
much love RoseJamine
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Re: Re. My Dearest
3rd Jan 2018 4:29pm
Thank you John for the nice comment. I alway convey what I feel, sometimes it seems naive, but it's just me.
Welcome to DUP, enjoy your writing , commenting, and making friends here.
love RoseJasmine
Welcome to DUP, enjoy your writing , commenting, and making friends here.
love RoseJasmine
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Re: Re. My Dearest
4th Jan 2018 1:40am
Re. My Dearest
Anonymous
4th Jan 2018 7:21am
So pure and tender RJ.
Beautiful <3
Beautiful <3
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Re: Re. My Dearest
4th Jan 2018 7:42am
Ah "pure and tender"...glad I made you feel that. Dear Sophie, thank you so much for the nice comment. It means a lot to me.
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. My Dearest
5th Jan 2018 5:44pm
I really relate to the beginning of that second stanza
"Have you thought of me
Are the days without me still lovely "
"For that I often wake up at midnight
no matter how many times
I can reach out arms to find our ties
no need to hide bleary eyes
I can feel free to gnaw my swollen lips
and swallow the oozing blood drips " -such longing displayed,the repetition of Love haunts us in the most tender aching ways.
i love the imagery you're painting
"solitude bangs
When the daft wind
break my soaring wings"
fragrant showers
crisp clean white shirts
everything just the way you remember
pristine memories pressed as an iron steaming on wrinkles
smoothing things out in your mind
fantastic write RoseJasmine
"Have you thought of me
Are the days without me still lovely "
"For that I often wake up at midnight
no matter how many times
I can reach out arms to find our ties
no need to hide bleary eyes
I can feel free to gnaw my swollen lips
and swallow the oozing blood drips " -such longing displayed,the repetition of Love haunts us in the most tender aching ways.
i love the imagery you're painting
"solitude bangs
When the daft wind
break my soaring wings"
fragrant showers
crisp clean white shirts
everything just the way you remember
pristine memories pressed as an iron steaming on wrinkles
smoothing things out in your mind
fantastic write RoseJasmine
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Re: Re. My Dearest
5th Jan 2018 6:10pm
I am so impressed by your comment you know Samael. How could you comment like taking notes? You have mentioned every detail from my poem and you used better words than I did, like"crisp clean white shirts" . I want to tip my cap to you for your excellent observation and the great feedback. Thank you so so much for spending time commenting.
much much love
RoseJasmine
much much love
RoseJasmine
Re: Re. My Dearest
5th Jan 2018 6:16pm
Re: Re. My Dearest
6th Jan 2018 1:16am
Re. My Dearest
6th Jan 2018 11:10am
Guess what? I bet you now feel that...see? I told you...feel it don't you?
That soul of the poet...it's been inside you that whole time, n now I can tell you
feel it! Good, becuz I knew it for awhile, n this ink is further proof, weaving ur verse as easy as breathing! I applaud you RJ!! :)
That soul of the poet...it's been inside you that whole time, n now I can tell you
feel it! Good, becuz I knew it for awhile, n this ink is further proof, weaving ur verse as easy as breathing! I applaud you RJ!! :)
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Re: Re. My Dearest
6th Jan 2018 11:51am
Hmm I can feel it a bit...more and more...it seems to come out easily than before. Dear Ric. thank you so so much for the always encouragement. I know there is still a long way to go....
much much love
RoseJasmine
much much love
RoseJasmine
Anonymous
- Edited 22nd Feb 2020 11:45am
6th Jan 2018 5:28pm
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Re: Re. My Dearest
6th Jan 2018 5:34pm
Thank you my dear Silence. Glad you like it. Appreciate your words.
much much love
RoseJasmine
much much love
RoseJasmine
Re. My Dearest
9th Jan 2018 7:19am
this is truly beautiful - in my estimation this is one of your best so far :-)))
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Re: Re. My Dearest
9th Jan 2018 1:50pm
Glad to know your estimation. you help me to know how good this is, but I know there is still a lot for me to work on ...
Thank you so much for the nice comment :-)))
much love
RoseJasmine
Thank you so much for the nice comment :-)))
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. My Dearest
9th Mar 2018 4:13pm
Poignant, yet utterly relatable. I appreciate the way you evoke longing without plunging into melancholia. There's a quiet dignity and grace to your work, RoseJasmine.
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Re: Re. My Dearest
9th Mar 2018 5:33pm
Ah Startlight, what a nice comment you made. So glad you pointed out the quality "quiet dignity and grace" in the write. I am impressed by your words.
Thank you so much for sharing your thought, and appreciate for the RL add.
much love
RoseJasmine
Thank you so much for sharing your thought, and appreciate for the RL add.
much love
RoseJasmine