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Buried
In the darkness it makes it's well trodden rounds,
Worn brakes screech with each seemingly never ending stop.
Balding tires roll to a shaky halt,
while rusty metal and faded paint
flitter and fall to pot holed pavement.
Deteriorating arms reach for the roach infested bin
and again the foul stench of cargo drifts
into what was once a flower scented breeze.
The groan of it's neglected hydraulic pump
echoes in the stillness of the night
when it lifts and spills the contents
into an empty void.
It then makes it's way to the landfill
to dump it's load atop previously deposited debris,
where it is covered and capped
in hopes no smell can be detected,
but it is known that beneath it all
seeps the toxic waste which lingers, infecting
the surrounding land, possibly to poison
those who dare enter within it's boundary.
And so it goes, a repeated scenario for as far
as the eye can see and the mind can imagine.
The dumping and burying of emotional baggage
brought upon them by the men or women
who claim to love them, only to use them as their
personal garbage bin.
As long as you willingly continue being
a garbage truck, the mound will grow and
your ground will remain a danger to you
and others as well.
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Re. Buried
15th Dec 2017 6:46pm
buried
yet powerfully emanating
is the wisdom
under the metaphor!
subject
as if on its own
was not rocking enough
the delivery
takes it deeper!
admirable
is the ink
wisdom- i have no words
to appreciate aptly.
yet powerfully emanating
is the wisdom
under the metaphor!
subject
as if on its own
was not rocking enough
the delivery
takes it deeper!
admirable
is the ink
wisdom- i have no words
to appreciate aptly.
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Re: Re. Buried
16th Dec 2017 8:17pm
A subject not personally experienced, I could only imagine the feelings brought upon those who have and tried to capture them here.
Thank you C_f, the visit and review much treasured.
Thank you C_f, the visit and review much treasured.
Re. Buried
15th Dec 2017 7:01pm
such an awesome metaphor - beautifully crafted - a home run of a poem :-)))
you're a wise lady :-)))
you're a wise lady :-)))
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Re: Re. Buried
16th Dec 2017 8:24pm
I tried to imagine how one would feel dealing with such matters and this came to mind.
Thank you David, much appreciated.
Teri
Thank you David, much appreciated.
Teri
Re. Buried
15th Dec 2017 7:02pm
beautiful Teri
profound metaphor
on love & the emotional garbage
we carry when in a bad relationship..
so much wisdom in you..
thank you for the read..
love Brenda
profound metaphor
on love & the emotional garbage
we carry when in a bad relationship..
so much wisdom in you..
thank you for the read..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Buried
16th Dec 2017 8:29pm
As with above replies, I could only attempt to put my perspective on how one would feel under these circumstances.
Very much appreciate your visits and comments on my page.
Teri
Very much appreciate your visits and comments on my page.
Teri
Re. Buried
15th Dec 2017 7:54pm
Damn, I can smell the stench from here... truly deep spill layered in disillusions n pain...
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Re: Re. Buried
16th Dec 2017 8:31pm
Yes, the odor of situations such as this must be overpowering to the one(s) subjected to it.
Many thanks for your visits and words.
Many thanks for your visits and words.
Re. Buried
15th Dec 2017 7:57pm
A metaphorical masterpiece. After I sensed your connection with the putrid refuse deposited on our psyche I reread the first part with much more clarity of thought. I especially like the "capped off" part...an attempt to stifle past abuse before the new garbageman/person arrives to dump additional trauma. Bravisima!
It also made me think of an outdoor theater in the SF Bay Area that was built on a dump site and the entire area had to be sealed with concrete because the gasses from rotting garbage were seeping up.
It also made me think of an outdoor theater in the SF Bay Area that was built on a dump site and the entire area had to be sealed with concrete because the gasses from rotting garbage were seeping up.
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Re: Re. Buried
16th Dec 2017 8:58pm
Having been fortunate never to be in a position as this, I used my imagination in an attempt to describe how I would feel. The inspiration for the format of the poem actually came from E, E, Cummings' poem "she being Brand", a poem I truly admire for the metaphors he used.
In reality the dump referred to here as with the SF one will always be there regardless of attempts to hide and forget them.
I truly appreciate your expanded and truthful comment, for your experience in having to return to the beginning of the read to understand the deeper meaning implied. It was in a large part the intent in writing it in the manner I chose.
Thank you for your candid acknowledgement in doing so.
Teri
In reality the dump referred to here as with the SF one will always be there regardless of attempts to hide and forget them.
I truly appreciate your expanded and truthful comment, for your experience in having to return to the beginning of the read to understand the deeper meaning implied. It was in a large part the intent in writing it in the manner I chose.
Thank you for your candid acknowledgement in doing so.
Teri
Re. Buried
Anonymous
16th Dec 2017 2:26am
This is incredible AT.
I could Feel it as I read It.
Truly a unique metaphor into what we often do!
Love this.
I could Feel it as I read It.
Truly a unique metaphor into what we often do!
Love this.
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Re: Re. Buried
Awww, my dear astute friend, with all I have witnessed within your poems I have no doubt you grasped the feelings conveyed in the write.
I have been truly gifted by the thoughts and feelings you written into your poems as well.
Thank you, thank you, thank you.
And another for the RL.
Teri
I have been truly gifted by the thoughts and feelings you written into your poems as well.
Thank you, thank you, thank you.
And another for the RL.
Teri
Re: Re. Buried
Anonymous
16th Dec 2017 10:28pm
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Re. Buried
16th Dec 2017 4:04am
As detestable as this person sounds, I must admit it could be about me, if you knew me that well. I think its resonance is what makes this so relatable and such an excellent poem interwoven brilliantly with surreal metaphors throughout. Some people like to pretend their own poop don't stink, then find themselves complaining something smells really bad in their refrigerator. Great poem Teri!!!
JJ
JJ
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Re: Re. Buried
16th Dec 2017 9:57pm
Through reading many of your poems since I have arrived on this site, I can only take your word regarding the first sentence in your comment, for I fail to see any semblance in what you put forth in your poems, and feel you're being too harsh on yourself.
If however, the poem causes you to reflect on past actions, then I am pleased it had that effect, as it was one of the intents in writing it.
"poop don't stink..................something smells really bad in their refrigerator" (LOL, puts a literal slant on "Don't shit where you eat") Love it!!!
Thank you for your honesty in commenting on my work.
It's appreciated very much.
Teri
If however, the poem causes you to reflect on past actions, then I am pleased it had that effect, as it was one of the intents in writing it.
"poop don't stink..................something smells really bad in their refrigerator" (LOL, puts a literal slant on "Don't shit where you eat") Love it!!!
Thank you for your honesty in commenting on my work.
It's appreciated very much.
Teri
Re. Buried
16th Dec 2017 4:37am
Re: Re. Buried
16th Dec 2017 9:12pm
I'm glad you enjoyed it and let me know here.
Thank you for your visit and comment.
Thank you for your visit and comment.
Driving down an ever turning road
21st Dec 2017 00:11am
I started the poem thinking it was about a murder until the line containing "toxic" and my mind shifted to environmentalism. Then I realized both were wrong when "emotional baggage" came. I didn't know the poem was explicitly about abusive relationships until reading the comments. The poem had such great imagery that my mind wasn't able to focus in the poem as a whole. Rereading, I see the brilliantly crafted extended metaphor.
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Re: Driving down an ever turning road
21st Dec 2017 1:05am
This is one of the most enjoyable comments I have received. That it led your mind in several directions, evoking thoughts on multiple plains until the end of the piece I believe is one of the true reasons for writing or reading poetry.
I feel greatly complimented for your words and I care not that my ego will have to suffer the slapping I will be applying in order to return it to reality.
The smiles you have gifted me will take awhile to remove. Thank You
AT
I feel greatly complimented for your words and I care not that my ego will have to suffer the slapping I will be applying in order to return it to reality.
The smiles you have gifted me will take awhile to remove. Thank You
AT
Re. Buried
12th Jan 2018 5:39am
This is so cool. Such a lovely shifting metaphor, making so many points as it shifts from verse to verse. Totally lovely :)
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Re: Re. Buried
12th Jan 2018 5:59am
Thank you very much for your kind comments, they are sincerely appreciated.
AT
AT