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Ethnically Sourced Excuses
Commodities
cold brewed
filter through
the necks of the select
drank by suitable swank
cupping Colombian grounds by pounds
drowning in dark water
heavy cream dreams
run smoothly down
Extending token entitled tendrils
to those in flesh
of richer blends
Beans traverse seas
cross' our fair trade burlap
bridges
watery - weak witticisms
& edgy evocative excerpts
issued as blurbs on foil bags
basic bitches love to read
Glitterati gossip glides - buttery
debutante drivel drips
& shrivels into dregs
steaming shots deliquesce - lush
potions poured for the posh
rainforest sweat
turns
into
earthy
metropolitan plush
Roasting aromas
by those of slight chroma
out of touch
patronizing those with much
Mahogany mouthfeel
for us with #blessed
deals
consuming caramelly concessions
on loveseat comforts- cruelty-free sprees
cappuccino oversights
delighting in our overfed overkill
Acrid aftertastes agitate
our asthete affections
in bold flavors - burst
We fancy ourselves saviors
heros of the herbal notes
caffeinated cunts...
who never fully woke
Published 19th Nov 2017
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19th Nov 2017 1:24pm
I really like the word swank...you already won me over at swank lol.
"basic bitches love to read"- AHAHAHAHA i'm dying over here.
the alliteration in this is just as perfect as pumps make calves look
good strong ending too
"We fancy ourselves saviors
heros of the herbal notes
caffeinated cunts...
who never fully woke "
"basic bitches love to read"- AHAHAHAHA i'm dying over here.
the alliteration in this is just as perfect as pumps make calves look
good strong ending too
"We fancy ourselves saviors
heros of the herbal notes
caffeinated cunts...
who never fully woke "
19th Nov 2017 4:35pm
That's high praise, high praise indeed! Calves look sexy as hell, so maybe my alliteration is smokin?!
Thanks dude, the feedback is better than coffee in the morning! 😆😊
Thanks dude, the feedback is better than coffee in the morning! 😆😊
19th Nov 2017 5:08pm
i do believe it is smoking.
i always leaving a poem overnight and coming back in the morning to feedback...there's no better feeling.
i always leaving a poem overnight and coming back in the morning to feedback...there's no better feeling.
19th Nov 2017 10:28pm
coffee with capitalism hold the sugar - such a very clever opera - it's funny I have now got in the habit now when I see your posts i prepare by getting my online dictionary on the other screen (lol)
fantastic write as always :-))))
fantastic write as always :-))))
19th Nov 2017 10:57pm
Yes! Only Stevia for me.
Thank you so much, this is actually one of my favorites (you know the feeling when you write something you just get REALLY invested in for whatever reason, and it's special to you...) personally.
That's funny...kind of what I do with yours, only it's more like bracing myself for the profane plunge! 😆 Really though, I appreciate the feedback man! Iron sharpens iron and you rock!
Thank you so much, this is actually one of my favorites (you know the feeling when you write something you just get REALLY invested in for whatever reason, and it's special to you...) personally.
That's funny...kind of what I do with yours, only it's more like bracing myself for the profane plunge! 😆 Really though, I appreciate the feedback man! Iron sharpens iron and you rock!
19th Nov 2017 11:04pm
20th Nov 2017 1:05am
Definitely one of your best, AtoMikOne. You've taken all the elements that make you shine as a writer and combined them here in this one poem: alliteration, assonance, consonance, metaphor. . .
Excellent write.
Excellent write.
20th Nov 2017 3:49am
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20th Nov 2017 4:51am
Not at all, you know my views on that! It's like comparing chardonnay to pinot noir! We have different styles :)
Actually that's horseshit, because I'm hopeless with wine and I don't know what I'm saying. But you get what I mean <3
Actually that's horseshit, because I'm hopeless with wine and I don't know what I'm saying. But you get what I mean <3
20th Nov 2017 4:51am
I'm not quite as hopeless witb coffee, I should've stuck to the analogies I'm adept at ;)
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20th Nov 2017 6:55am
Ehhh...as long as you concede to being the white chocolate 🤔😝
That's not cool though. I like your stuff, but not white chocolate....
That's not cool though. I like your stuff, but not white chocolate....
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