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eternity's song
in my defining hour
you found me lacking
a child with no song
on the stage of life
humming along to other's tunes
without one of my own
I was bereft & barefoot
navigating minefields
treacherous is the road
when you follow
where others lead
then you came
placed a melody in my heart
a secret one just for me
delicate notes I could dance to
a ballet for the soul
as I pirouette through the void
the darkness no longer had affect
& I was free to sing a song of my own
Published 12th Oct 2017
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12th Oct 2017 2:31pm
A beautifully crafted and presented poem. You're amazing me with your talent dear poetess.
Enjoyed this one, spewed from you quill.
Excellent work!
Enjoyed this one, spewed from you quill.
Excellent work!
thank you dearest Teri you made my morning brighter i'm smiling big over here :) ~Raven
12th Oct 2017 2:48pm
12th Oct 2017 2:54pm
12th Oct 2017 4:39pm
The first and last lines say it all..... in my defining hour..... I was free to sing my own song. This is an excellent write. Raven you really do have a way of expressing yourself.
Thank you for the write.
Thank you for the write.
12th Oct 2017 4:44pm
thank you graciously dearest Wolfe your comment brought tears to my eyes with its beauty & perception.. I deeply appreciate your thoughts.. ~Raven
12th Oct 2017 5:12pm
Man - I felt this one - I can't remember who taught me the song of my own maybe nobody, maybe I just got pissed off following :-)
this is a wonderful write with a positive ending - we all need more like this :-)
this is a wonderful write with a positive ending - we all need more like this :-)
12th Oct 2017 5:20pm
thank you graciously dearest poet I absolutely love your comment so happy you found a song of your own to dance & sing to.. ~Raven
12th Oct 2017 7:11pm
12th Oct 2017 8:01pm
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13th Oct 2017 4:55am
and how beautiful is your song dear poetess?!! :):) Oh my goodness, this is just precious...the imagery had me jumping and then swept me off my feet! I tip my pen!
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
18th Oct 2017 6:31pm
thank you dearest poetess my song is in my heart it shines & falters given any certain day but I persist in singing it is my very own.. ~Raven
