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alone with the dark
i lie awake & silently scream at night
the dark crowds in
with violent whispers
i see my flaws
they converge on me
& surround my trembling soul
they're the monsters
i carry in the day
concealed under
well applied makeup
& my smiling face
if people looked closer
they would see
the cracks in my veneer
i've slipped sideways
in my thoughts
the fall is coming
i feel it
i walk a fine line
between sane & insane
hanging on to what's left of reality
as the dark crowds in on me
& whispers violently
of a lady letting go
swimming in a vomit of lies
drowned by my own deceit
to my horror i realize
the voices are right
*inspired by Takis In The Dark
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Re. alone with the dark
Anonymous
5th Oct 2017 4:56am
My Beautiful Brenda, voices have their purpose, I believe they rise from deep within and are always trying to protect us in some way...they may come in the forms of nightmares and those are the ones trying to guide to another destination I believe and when in beautiful dreams they are trying to guide you to that very same destination...in the nightmares you runaway from the bad there and in beautiful dreams we run towards it...the voices are speaking for a reason, one which your inner psyche knows and one day it will fully reveal the reason once it feels safe enough to fully emerge from under the veneer...perhaps insecurity?
Well applied make up or not, you are achingly beautiful to me and I love you with all of me...
yours forever & always
xoxoxox Taryn
Well applied make up or not, you are achingly beautiful to me and I love you with all of me...
yours forever & always
xoxoxox Taryn
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thank you my love I believe you are right the voices are a warning I need to heed they are working on my conscience & need to be heard.. I feel I know the reason for their speaking up at this time.. I just pray to the gods I am strong enough to heed their advise.. I love you fiercely.. love Brenda
Re. alone with the dark
Anonymous
5th Oct 2017 2:37pm
I have no words of wisdom that your beautiful love above me has not already spoken. All I can offer is love and many hugs.
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Re: Re. alone with the dark
5th Oct 2017 3:56pm
thank you lovely one your presence is a great comfort the dark doesn't feel so cold & lonely anymore.. love you lady.. Crim
Re. alone with the dark
6th Oct 2017 3:13am
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6th Oct 2017 4:13pm
sending love to you warrior soul keep fighting the dark & so will I I deeply appreciate your visit thank you.. love Brenda
Re. alone with the dark
6th Oct 2017 10:35am
Reminds me of a piece I did a long time ago for Halloween... N yea like my piece, THIS was scary n dark... Excellent imagery here :)
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6th Oct 2017 4:14pm
Re. alone with the dark
7th Oct 2017 8:31pm
I know how it feels to lie awake and have the night's darkest and most troubling thoughts come crowding in. And they become magnified somehow, sometimes flat-out terrifying. You're not alone Lady Crim, and as far as I'm concerned those voices haven't a clue.
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7th Oct 2017 8:36pm
thank you dearest Sir Crow for such an understanding & beautiful comment.. love Crim
Re. alone with the dark
9th Oct 2017 4:57pm
I almost can’t believe you’ve put these words together just so; I have at least a few unpublished poems eerily similar.
Here you’ve expressed every inch of the slowly ticking minute-hand of a clock, many nights of mine that seem to stand still. I will not even look back to my poems that speak to yours, for you have voiced here the screaming truths I’ve been staring at in the backs of my eyelids while the moon hangs above me.
I can not thank you enough... for the simple yet unimaginable solace this poem brings me.
You may not know me, but here you’ve managed to reach into my mind, heart, and soul. I’m sorry that you’ve felt this in your life.
Much love, dearest crim <3
Here you’ve expressed every inch of the slowly ticking minute-hand of a clock, many nights of mine that seem to stand still. I will not even look back to my poems that speak to yours, for you have voiced here the screaming truths I’ve been staring at in the backs of my eyelids while the moon hangs above me.
I can not thank you enough... for the simple yet unimaginable solace this poem brings me.
You may not know me, but here you’ve managed to reach into my mind, heart, and soul. I’m sorry that you’ve felt this in your life.
Much love, dearest crim <3
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10th Oct 2017 5:36pm
dearest Nightbird I really wasn't sure about this poem because it is so dark & bleak but knowing I reached you makes me really happy.. to understand I am not truly alone in the dark.. when others like you dear soul feel the same way.. I would love to see your unpublished poems if you ever want to share them.. love Crim
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Anonymous
14th Oct 2017 5:22am
Brenda.. you burn true.. and never hide behind makeup.. that's what makes you beautiful.. you're real.. love you my sister..
Dave
Dave
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17th Oct 2017 8:21pm
thank you Dave this was a more painful write I try to be true to my heart when I write.. love you.. Brenda