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the lady the rain
an old man sat
under clear blue sky
under an old oak tree
from an era gone by
staring at the desert
the vast salt plane
scribbling on the ground
the lady, the rain
a traveler stops
asks what the hell
how on earth here
does the old man dwell?
the old man replies
it's a long tale to tell
to keep it short
it's when the rain fell
the desert was a green
a sight to be seen
meadows by the river
blessings rain delivered
no further to this story
'cept the days of glory
the story's mine to keep
now head back in your jeep
the traveler obliged
take care he replied
the old man smiled
for the briefest of a while
back to the tree
desert's all he'd see
started scribbling again
the lady, the rain
Published 27th Sep 2017
| Edited 30th Sep 2017
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27th Sep 2017 00:32am
Brilliant piece of poetry, cold, as usual you have astonished with you're impeccable talent.
~anonshadow
~anonshadow
27th Sep 2017 00:35am
affection.
is in the eye of the Friend.
honor is what he engulfs.
appreciation.
held deep.
is in the eye of the Friend.
honor is what he engulfs.
appreciation.
held deep.
27th Sep 2017 00:54am
humor.
best remedy.
regardless the story.
honor is the writer's for a peer admired to grace such a review.
appreciation.
deep!
best remedy.
regardless the story.
honor is the writer's for a peer admired to grace such a review.
appreciation.
deep!
like the lemon garnish
of a bloody good drink
that jeep
yes
humor
life support
pass it round
but
some
stories
worth waiting for
some
worth keeping
some
so much so
they're never shared
of a bloody good drink
that jeep
yes
humor
life support
pass it round
but
some
stories
worth waiting for
some
worth keeping
some
so much so
they're never shared
well.
peer's review.
pure gold.
yes
some stories
worth waiting for
some
will never be told
for some
they're going all they way
peer's review.
pure gold.
yes
some stories
worth waiting for
some
will never be told
for some
they're going all they way
27th Sep 2017 1:49am
The poet's talent again shines upon my screen.
His insight as clear as the sky within the write.
Another keeper enjoyed.
His insight as clear as the sky within the write.
Another keeper enjoyed.
27th Sep 2017 1:54am
repeating on same page
beauty is in the eye of the peer esteemed.
so is the light.
honored is the friend here.
Appreciation.
deep!
beauty is in the eye of the peer esteemed.
so is the light.
honored is the friend here.
Appreciation.
deep!
Anonymous
- Edited 30th Jan 2023 2:45pm
27th Sep 2017 2:44pm
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30th Sep 2017 00:50am
Welcome
is the peer
and the beautiful
appreciation.
both
held dear
and close!
is the peer
and the beautiful
appreciation.
both
held dear
and close!
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12th Oct 2017 7:45pm
you are a very good writer. but i will say thank you for the compliments
16th Oct 2017 10:25am
well..compliments
is what the peer
just left here.
peer
compliments
appreciated.
deeply.
is what the peer
just left here.
peer
compliments
appreciated.
deeply.
8th Oct 2017 5:03am
This paints a lovely picture of an ancient scene for me... Perhaps a shaman lost in time, scribing in the sands for his lady rain to return and renew the earth, the only acknowledgment of his existence by a lone traveler. Excellent!
9th Oct 2017 10:14am
A poem
is only as good
as the story it conveys
to each individual reader.
What it delivered
to the Peer here
is but a matter of joy as
it is not far
from the intended.
The peer's appreciation
and glowing review
is but an honor.
is only as good
as the story it conveys
to each individual reader.
What it delivered
to the Peer here
is but a matter of joy as
it is not far
from the intended.
The peer's appreciation
and glowing review
is but an honor.
