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She
The essence of woman
A vision of the flower of life
The sweetness of honey
Beauty grown in the holy garden...
She walks with purpose
And speaks with compassion
A brown tipped flower
With eyes of glassy soul...
In tune with herself
In harmony with the cosmos
The sound of lovely wind
As she talks to the moon...
A witness of the maker
A bringer of the night
She shines brighter than the sun
To dim the highest light...
Will the earth spin?
Or the world be fulfilled?
A thought of substance
She makes the deal...
A vision of the flower of life
The sweetness of honey
Beauty grown in the holy garden...
She walks with purpose
And speaks with compassion
A brown tipped flower
With eyes of glassy soul...
In tune with herself
In harmony with the cosmos
The sound of lovely wind
As she talks to the moon...
A witness of the maker
A bringer of the night
She shines brighter than the sun
To dim the highest light...
Will the earth spin?
Or the world be fulfilled?
A thought of substance
She makes the deal...
Written by
runaway-mindtrain
Published 21st Aug 2017
| Edited 23rd Aug 2018
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21st Aug 2017 3:52am
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21st Aug 2017 4:16am
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Anonymous
21st Aug 2017 4:13am
Hey Sea.......this is beautiful and touching to me..........WOWZERS!! RL for me on this stunning ink.......I'm speechless from its beauty and tranquility.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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21st Aug 2017 4:18am
thanks...that means so very much...i am so happy to get such warm critiques...it makes me write more...-J
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21st Aug 2017 8:04am
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21st Aug 2017 8:41am
she is a lovely star in my sky...thanks for the read man...much appreciated-J
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21st Aug 2017 12:32pm
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21st Aug 2017 6:33pm
she is a shooting star...that I am starting to fall for....but you know all about starzzz...thanks for the read..i really appreciate it-J
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24th Aug 2017 4:12am
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24th Aug 2017 4:22am
thanks so much...I have always liked your screen name...it is a poem in of itself...so cool...thanks for read...-J
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I felt more punctuation would've helped readers. I like these lines, "A witness of the maker / A bringer of the night," as well as the small rhyme following it.
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5th Sep 2017 4:29am
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9th Sep 2017 00:03am
flowers tipped with many colors make the garden beautiful...thank you my lovely flower for your sweet words-J
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14th Sep 2017 1:32pm
i felt more punctuation or stanza breaks could've been helpful. I like this implied personification and metaphor, "The sound of lovely wind / As she talks to the moon."
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Anonymous
18th Sep 2017 6:47am
This has got to be one of the most beautiful thoughts,
I have read on here so far.
Bravissimo!
I have read on here so far.
Bravissimo!
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10th Dec 2017 7:09am
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Re. She
5th May 2018 2:15pm
This is breathtaking...one of the most beautiful love poems I have ever read.
love
Jas
love
Jas
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6th May 2018 2:39am