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You Must Be
You must be the intimate of my past life
Otherwise, you won’t detect my depression
And come to embrace me
To destroy my empty obsession
Otherwise, you won’t perceive my stress
And listen to my complaints
While I am hiding my duress
Otherwise, you won’t sense my pain
And hug me tight
Even though I conceal my shame
You must be my man in another life
Otherwise, you won’t know I feel unstable
And come to take my part
Even though I disguise being able
Otherwise, you won’t rescue my trouble
And stretch out your hand
While I am trapped in my bubble
Otherwise, you won’t take my ferocity
And dare to stand by me
While I am erupting and spewing animosity
You must be my reincarnated lover
Otherwise, you won’t understand my despair
And look into my eyes
While I am projecting no care
Otherwise, you won’t sense I’m naughty
And dare to tease me
While I am showing off my devil’s body
Otherwise, you won’t know when I sleep with eyes tight
And text a message
To say Sleep Well, Good Night
Thank you for always being by my side
Note: Thanks to my best friend Dorin Flynn who helped me with this poem.
Otherwise, you won’t detect my depression
And come to embrace me
To destroy my empty obsession
Otherwise, you won’t perceive my stress
And listen to my complaints
While I am hiding my duress
Otherwise, you won’t sense my pain
And hug me tight
Even though I conceal my shame
You must be my man in another life
Otherwise, you won’t know I feel unstable
And come to take my part
Even though I disguise being able
Otherwise, you won’t rescue my trouble
And stretch out your hand
While I am trapped in my bubble
Otherwise, you won’t take my ferocity
And dare to stand by me
While I am erupting and spewing animosity
You must be my reincarnated lover
Otherwise, you won’t understand my despair
And look into my eyes
While I am projecting no care
Otherwise, you won’t sense I’m naughty
And dare to tease me
While I am showing off my devil’s body
Otherwise, you won’t know when I sleep with eyes tight
And text a message
To say Sleep Well, Good Night
Thank you for always being by my side
Note: Thanks to my best friend Dorin Flynn who helped me with this poem.
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Thank you my dear friend, for the read and the nice comment. Yes, there is a lot of pain in my life, but luckily I have such a good fiend who always stands by me. Now I feel I have another one, Thank you for joining my life. RoseJasmine
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Anonymous
18th Aug 2017 7:35pm
Solid ink !!
Well done !!!
Well done !!!
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19th Aug 2017 4:30am
Thank you my dear friend, for always coming to rescue me when I need you, even though you are such so far away lol... RoseJasmine
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Anonymous
19th Aug 2017 4:47am
Hey Rose........I really like this.......feels as if you've emptied your soul thru your words........feeling the emotions.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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19th Aug 2017 4:54am
Hey Flowergirl, such nice of you to say so, yes I did empty my soul, and I have so many thanks to my frends who always support me. So happy I have your support too. With lots of love RoseJasmine
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19th Aug 2017 9:35am
The first stanza hooked me immediately ... great opening lines!
In the second stanza, third line ... you want to make that "complaints".
I LOVE your line "you must be the intimate of my past life" ... but you're overusing it a bit; I'd say try tweeking the poem by using it every third stanza.
Peace.
In the second stanza, third line ... you want to make that "complaints".
I LOVE your line "you must be the intimate of my past life" ... but you're overusing it a bit; I'd say try tweeking the poem by using it every third stanza.
Peace.
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19th Aug 2017 9:40am
Thank you for reading my peom and sharing your thoughts. Yeah, it could be like that and it would be a lot of different. Thank you for the suggestion, I will keep it in mind..... RoseJasmine
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19th Aug 2017 3:48pm
Again, thank you for the comment. I modified it already. Is it better? With love, RoseJasmine
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20th Aug 2017 7:09pm
now kost excellent beautifullllllll hope they all Boost it up and all read it's wonderful and congrats epeost it even those who have already commented will marvel . Change the title just to catch older fishermen who have already enjoyed the earlier fish Don't cry Now I will only read your poetry please .
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20th Aug 2017 7:21pm
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23rd Aug 2017 2:34am
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25th Aug 2017 3:29am
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22nd Aug 2017 12:51pm
Dear Rose ,
I am deeply sorry for your situation and if I can do something for you, say it.
I am beside you !
Andi
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22nd Aug 2017 3:24pm
Hey Andi, thank you so much for the support and being willing to stand by me. Really appreciate!
RoseJasmine
RoseJasmine
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23rd Aug 2017 00:50am
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Hi, my dear friend, thank you for always being my supporter. You are such special a friend I should thank to..... RJ
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23rd Aug 2017 1:36pm
Oh, how it touches my soul! Thank you, beautiful writing makes me feel so much!
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23rd Aug 2017 1:43pm
Lena, thank you for coming to stand by me. Glad it has the power to touch your soul. I'm happy to have you to read my poem. Your comment means a lot to me. RoseJasmine
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28th Aug 2017 6:23pm
cum post another one
at 14th you have got stuck
o poet your poetry is
L O V E L Y
Do it
what
Compose what else haahahahaaa
ur now on line read latest ones of mine
RAIN
at 14th you have got stuck
o poet your poetry is
L O V E L Y
Do it
what
Compose what else haahahahaaa
ur now on line read latest ones of mine
RAIN
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31st Aug 2017 3:30am
open your eyes lady poet- tree
your poems are awaited by not only me
see not with shut eyes
open your self
none will despise
yes poet it must be day light
sunrise so rise
your poems are awaited by not only me
see not with shut eyes
open your self
none will despise
yes poet it must be day light
sunrise so rise
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31st Aug 2017 4:32pm
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1st Sep 2017 1:51am
Thank you Purpleheart, for the nice comment. Yes, it's from my heart, very deep.....Appreciate your support! RoseJasmine
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2nd Sep 2017 11:57am
incarnated yes...I know an old soul when I read one...quite a few on this site...never more than a few in the world...love the poly rhythm... a well laid rose-ry...-J
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2nd Sep 2017 12:36pm
Hey hey J, glad to see you again. And still have to thank you for spending your time reading and commenting. Seems like you are interested in incarnation....Much much appreciate! RoseJasmine
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5th Sep 2017 4:00pm
Hey Danny, nice to meet you here. Thank you so much for stopping by and sharing your thoughts. Lucky me to have him a best friend who is always there with me no matter what happens. Really appreciate your nice comment. RoseJasmine
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19th Sep 2017 8:23pm
Extremely gripping
One need to get extra
Close to us in order to understand us
One need to get extra
Close to us in order to understand us
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Hey Lucas, nice to meet you here. Thank you for the nice comment. I think "extremely gripping" is a very good compliment. Enjoy your visit. RoseJasmine
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25th Sep 2017 11:14pm
I love the intimate declaration at the end of each stanza...such insight...to draw in your past love..embracing your ancient soulmate...I can't help but feel... to stretch out my spirit and kiss your naughty mind...-J
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26th Sep 2017 3:41am
Ohhh J, so nice of you to visit me again. If you stretch out your hands, i will hold them tight. If you stretch out your spirit, I will cherish it all.....your spirit is very beautiful..... Thank you for always discovering something different. I am very naughty indeed....so watch out.... Love, RoseJasmine