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even death moves. moves at the speed of light.
that's why the stars are so far away
and you can still see them.
their death is pure.
stars know only absolute circle death.
and what about that phone call?
you knew it was coming but not when.
you put the phone down and ppl ask are you alright?
you say yeah cos it's not you that's dead.
you go for a walk and everything is slow
when death's blitzed thru.
at the funeral everybody is saying sorry
and other cultural words but language is the deadest thing
since thousands and thousands of years.
only the sounds are alive and the tones
and the sobbing.
I leave and look for the closest bus stop
and it's an awesome looking afternoon
cos the sun is really shining its brains out.
that's why the stars are so far away
and you can still see them.
their death is pure.
stars know only absolute circle death.
and what about that phone call?
you knew it was coming but not when.
you put the phone down and ppl ask are you alright?
you say yeah cos it's not you that's dead.
you go for a walk and everything is slow
when death's blitzed thru.
at the funeral everybody is saying sorry
and other cultural words but language is the deadest thing
since thousands and thousands of years.
only the sounds are alive and the tones
and the sobbing.
I leave and look for the closest bus stop
and it's an awesome looking afternoon
cos the sun is really shining its brains out.
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9th Aug 2017 9:36pm
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9th Aug 2017 9:47pm
Fuck, kid......a most eXXcelent 'return' to this fcknLovely 'site' (g'oddblezz'it).
sweet surprise to see yr wordilations again, Danny.
sweet surprise to see yr wordilations again, Danny.
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9th Aug 2017 9:48pm
Fuck, kid......a most eXXcelent 'return' to this fcknLovely 'site' (g'oddblezz'it).
sweet surprise to see yr wordilations again, Danny.
sweet surprise to see yr wordilations again, Danny.
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10th Aug 2017 2:16am
welcome back
good stuff, first couple of lines work well. I thought 'even' was a different way to start. I use 'and' sometimes, see it a fair bit too.
There's a line " stars only know " one. have a look at it again see what you think
couple of different aspects make it interesting to ponder about. the few dots which make the title loud enough, p'raps deep also
anyhow,
good to see you around, man
good stuff, first couple of lines work well. I thought 'even' was a different way to start. I use 'and' sometimes, see it a fair bit too.
There's a line " stars only know " one. have a look at it again see what you think
couple of different aspects make it interesting to ponder about. the few dots which make the title loud enough, p'raps deep also
anyhow,
good to see you around, man
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13th Aug 2017 1:38pm
cheers folks. actually just randomly linked into the place from someone else's link and then randomly logged in the went one random act further and posted something. think I was drunk or something similar idk. but thanks :)
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13th Aug 2017 1:40pm
shittiest bit of the shit poem is "awesome looking", cos I'd never say that. just not hipster enough
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15th Oct 2017 12:33pm
It's perfect irreverence of language, (showcasing the point you made earlier in the poem, i hope) matches the last line flawlessly. I thought it was one of the more clever bits for usage, personally
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24th Oct 2017 9:33am
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13th Aug 2017 2:24pm
your video is superb.....
Note: NOT saying 'awesome' is hipper than saying it,
but since 'hip' has long been shat around & upon by commercial
interests, it says nothing about anything,
.....but everyone's allowed a slip ev'y now/then.
Note: NOT saying 'awesome' is hipper than saying it,
but since 'hip' has long been shat around & upon by commercial
interests, it says nothing about anything,
.....but everyone's allowed a slip ev'y now/then.
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3rd Dec 2017 10:33pm
Out of all of the funerals I have been to, I can never recall it raining when it was over. During, but never after. The sun was always shinning it's brains out.
I knew this before and thought it was a great piece of writing then. I enjoy hearing you read even if the xylophone distracts me.
I knew this before and thought it was a great piece of writing then. I enjoy hearing you read even if the xylophone distracts me.
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23rd Feb 2018 00:22am
The last attempt to understand why we exist.
- Bob Dylan's style is within those words -
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- Bob Dylan's style is within those words -
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17th Apr 2018 6:18pm
its like everything falls into place...how you revolve around death n life with all correlations cleverly woven in your fast pace i remember from your reads..the last verses light up the needful light..striking the chord from start to finish.. absolutely captivating read n the spoken word.
thanks fr the read Mr.A :)
thanks fr the read Mr.A :)
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18th Apr 2018 12:59pm
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17th Apr 2018 6:18pm
its like everything falls into place...how you revolve around death n life with all correlations cleverly woven in your fast pace i remember from your reads..the last verses light up the needful light..striking the chord from start to finish.. absolutely captivating read n the spoken word.
thanks fr the read Mr.A :)
thanks fr the read Mr.A :)
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