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Just Thinking
I looked into the sky
And saw nothing but blue
I closed my eyes
And I thought about you
I thought about the
Night we were together
And I wished that I
Could keep you forever and ever
I looked into the sky
And saw nothing but blue
And I cried because I
Was no longer with you
And saw nothing but blue
I closed my eyes
And I thought about you
I thought about the
Night we were together
And I wished that I
Could keep you forever and ever
I looked into the sky
And saw nothing but blue
And I cried because I
Was no longer with you
Published 5th Sep 2011
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5th Sep 2011 1:35am
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9th Sep 2011 1:16am
this is a nice little number, short and quaint.
if i had to find something to fault it. i would point out the line.
Could keep you forever and ever
i think you could lose either the forever or the and ever, the line is too big compared to the rest of them. also i think one or the other will get across what you are saying well enough.
that said good job all in.
shine on!
if i had to find something to fault it. i would point out the line.
Could keep you forever and ever
i think you could lose either the forever or the and ever, the line is too big compared to the rest of them. also i think one or the other will get across what you are saying well enough.
that said good job all in.
shine on!
9th Sep 2011 2:16am
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