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Bottled
Like many
I used to
Keep my
feelings
Bottled up
Now with
Vodka shots
I bottle up
my feelings
my feelings are
numb
guilty
fearful
scary
violent
sleepy
strange
hate
rage
smiley
I profess love easily, but in truth
I have love for the vodka alone
Try taking my bottle away
See how loved you really are
You’re the one that will get bottled
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Re. Bottled
Anonymous
14th Jun 2017 3:59am
Hey David......I understand this ore than I would like to admit.......bottoms up.....purple luv & hugs xo :)
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17th Jun 2017 1:39am
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14th Jun 2017 5:10am
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14th Jun 2017 12:13pm
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17th Jun 2017 1:42am
LOL - I love the word "Shite" - one day I am gonna write a poem called "Shite" :-) glad you enjoyed it :-)
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14th Jun 2017 1:49pm
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17th Jun 2017 1:42am
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14th Jun 2017 3:54pm
Lil, bottles up... do you keep your bottle on a pillow next to you so she's there when you wake up?
JJ
JJ
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17th Jun 2017 1:43am
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14th Jun 2017 11:05pm
find vodka rather transparent,
whereas rum is so dark,
only scotch holds the light ..
whereas rum is so dark,
only scotch holds the light ..
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17th Jun 2017 1:45am
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17th Jun 2017 6:40pm
For me, it's the( all- too- temporary) 'tainted' magic of Merlot--enticing... until the 'spell' wears off..
This one touches a bit too deeply for me--sadly admitting. Appreciating the 'darker' (ironic) sense of humor in your final stanza, however.
Sending a bit of empathetic understanding, your way!
Slainte!
Enchantress
(I am shaking my head, and still have no credible (clue), or explanation, as to why i have never wandered within your realm--until now...and thinking what an incredible mistake on my part!! ) All this time, i have been missing out on your unique talent!! Well.....from now on, i plan on correcting this error, by visiting more often. That is....if i may be considered a welcome guest here?? Hopefully, so!)
This one touches a bit too deeply for me--sadly admitting. Appreciating the 'darker' (ironic) sense of humor in your final stanza, however.
Sending a bit of empathetic understanding, your way!
Slainte!
Enchantress
(I am shaking my head, and still have no credible (clue), or explanation, as to why i have never wandered within your realm--until now...and thinking what an incredible mistake on my part!! ) All this time, i have been missing out on your unique talent!! Well.....from now on, i plan on correcting this error, by visiting more often. That is....if i may be considered a welcome guest here?? Hopefully, so!)
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20th Jun 2017 9:24pm
I am deeply humbled by your comments - I have to say my face just turned a kind of lobster red. You are so very welcome and just so you know I do love "Honest Crits" so love them or loath them just say why :-) sending you 1000 welcoming ehugs :-) David