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Pitch Noir
She sighs and flips off the light
Knowing how I adore the dark
This luxury of shadows
The seduction of her secret smile
Images flash like strobes
Fleeting faces, accusations
Friends betrayed or left for dead
Lies told with the pillow talk
Blood stains on the bed
I can see her silhouette above me
Looming as she rides and grinds
Her pillow pressed firmly to my face
As I fire that final shot
Farewell, my lovely,
My black angel to the core.
Knowing how I adore the dark
This luxury of shadows
The seduction of her secret smile
Images flash like strobes
Fleeting faces, accusations
Friends betrayed or left for dead
Lies told with the pillow talk
Blood stains on the bed
I can see her silhouette above me
Looming as she rides and grinds
Her pillow pressed firmly to my face
As I fire that final shot
Farewell, my lovely,
My black angel to the core.
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Re. Pitch Noir
2nd Jun 2017 6:06pm
Sir Crow I love this dark noir it is thrilling & sexy..
I adore that you have the upper hand with this black angel ;)
love Crim
I adore that you have the upper hand with this black angel ;)
love Crim
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2nd Jun 2017 6:17pm
Thanks Crim. I tried to make it hard to tell who really gets the upper hand here. Is that a really a gun that's going off, or...... Near suffocation or strangulation is reported to bring on cosmic orgasms during sex. Not something I'm inclined to try. Anyway, maybe I should be a little clearer next time....
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2nd Jun 2017 6:27pm
sorry my dearest Sir Crow I'm not always so hot at reading comprehension you are a master story teller & I was sexually thrilled by the read.. love Crim
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3rd Jun 2017 00:40am
That's an interesting way to go about it:) Can't say I am acquainted with it but I imagine there are two ways to look at it and at what went off. Good read, Crowfly.
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Anonymous
3rd Jun 2017 7:17pm
i adore the edginess, mister crow, the breath play/control is an absolutely thrilling addition & ties in wonderfully with the strobe images... a bit like flickering eyelids during strangulation/asphyxiation.
pure deliciousness
xo
pure deliciousness
xo
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4th Jun 2017 10:03pm
I'm glad you picked that up, Katja. This is how it was described to me by one who tried asphyxiation and passed out before climax. All that flashing! Thanks you...
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Anonymous
4th Jun 2017 8:05pm
My Lovely Sir Crow, touching on a subject I wouldn't expect to see coming from you...this darkened noir drifts off peacefully as one should after such a trusted interlude...I enjoyed this! I love you! With much love - Taryn xoxo
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Anonymous
4th Jun 2017 9:13pm
Hey Crow........now this is mysteriously thought provoking........very exciting ink.......you're so creative.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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6th Jun 2017 7:21pm
I just hope it's mysterious and not incomprehensible. Sometimes I get mixed up by my own words.....
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6th Jun 2017 4:23pm
Ughhh yes please. I forgot exactly what you can do with words. Simply sublime. Dazzling.
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