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to burn is to shine
to burn is to shine
anger
i've lost mine
i prefer the smouldering
to the spectacular eruption
for the flash
will disappear
in a flash
whilst the smoulder
has only
just begun
an old man lay
motionless
not far from clay
emotionless
the clay was once a flash
now volcanic ash
the smouldering heart
of the old man
still beats
and beats the clay
that isn't clay
yet!
ай KDAmB 2017. All rights reserved.
Published 16th Apr 2017
| Edited 17th Apr 2017
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16th Apr 2017 5:42pm
I really enjoyed the twist of this, birdman. There's a reason we burn slowly; that our glaze be beautiful.
16th Apr 2017 5:59pm
Welcome dear Sage One!
glad and elated you liked the scribble dear honored poet. Yes, indeed! I could never have said better than what you've just stated. Appreciate sincerely your visit and deep insight dear Friend!
warm regards
KDAmB
glad and elated you liked the scribble dear honored poet. Yes, indeed! I could never have said better than what you've just stated. Appreciate sincerely your visit and deep insight dear Friend!
warm regards
KDAmB
16th Apr 2017 5:57pm
love the wisdom in this write KDAmB smolder on.. touching us with your passion :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
16th Apr 2017 6:02pm
Welcome Dear Friend Brenda!
I've gotta confess, you've got a beautiful perspective- I put on a try hard- you see it as passion- no am not trying to be sarcastic- just expressing my resultant humility by your kindness. Thank You Brenda!
warm regards
KDAmB
I've gotta confess, you've got a beautiful perspective- I put on a try hard- you see it as passion- no am not trying to be sarcastic- just expressing my resultant humility by your kindness. Thank You Brenda!
warm regards
KDAmB
16th Apr 2017 7:07pm
the second half of this poem really speaks to me, of me - my anger is fast and furious but short lived - I am not sure which is better - thoughts provoked - thank you :-)
16th Apr 2017 7:12pm
Welcome dear Friend Dave!
glad indeed I am to see you and to learn that the scribble provoked some thoughts is indeed an honor.Palpable is your anger from your passionate writes my mate. I thank you for your kindness and support.
warm regards
KDAmB
glad indeed I am to see you and to learn that the scribble provoked some thoughts is indeed an honor.Palpable is your anger from your passionate writes my mate. I thank you for your kindness and support.
warm regards
KDAmB
17th Apr 2017 00:06am
it feels the newness forever you naturally devise to flow... you say so here..
"whilst he smoulder
has only
just begun"
though conscious of the cycle, the end and the repeats..
"the smouldering heart
of the old man
still beats
and beats the clay
that isn't clay
yet!"
there is a birth ...a happening phase pace longer yet faster than the fastest in this smouldering...and a staling slowness ..only a crashing in death in those flash n ash u compare. well, metaphors work well n your delivery is admirable in its shortness:)
...
"whilst he smoulder
has only
just begun"
though conscious of the cycle, the end and the repeats..
"the smouldering heart
of the old man
still beats
and beats the clay
that isn't clay
yet!"
there is a birth ...a happening phase pace longer yet faster than the fastest in this smouldering...and a staling slowness ..only a crashing in death in those flash n ash u compare. well, metaphors work well n your delivery is admirable in its shortness:)
...
19th Apr 2017 11:43pm
:-)
Welcome dear friend. I thank you sincerely for the honoring of my scribble with your gem of an insightful feedback. It is but a compliment for me.
The intention was to focus on the vent both literal and personal and on the broader truth of carbon cycle through the phases.
I thank You Uma once again for honoring my scribble.
Kind regards
KDAmB
Welcome dear friend. I thank you sincerely for the honoring of my scribble with your gem of an insightful feedback. It is but a compliment for me.
The intention was to focus on the vent both literal and personal and on the broader truth of carbon cycle through the phases.
I thank You Uma once again for honoring my scribble.
Kind regards
KDAmB
