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Sweet Tea
When lonesome home I have a cup of tea,
A gentle steaming cup to put me right.
I hear the mantle ticking of the clock
And watch Venetian sunrise' morning light.
The crack of day is empty in my hands
While warmth of vessel cradles tenderly.
I think of nothing in these vacant notes,
And then I see him peeking in on me.
I know he's far away at work in thought;
Perhaps still tending his own cup of sweet,
Or pouring tanic acid from an urn
And touches lips to rim to think of me.
I live these times for when we phantom meet,
When morning wraps us in a gentle sweep.
A moment from when life begins to rise
While lovers sip from cups of amber steeped.
April 10 ( NaPoWriMo 2017 )
Venetian = blinds
Published 10th Apr 2017
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10th Apr 2017 11:21am
Such a gentle rise to day and lovely sentiment... It warms the heart like Earl Grey or Peppermint Chai...
Great offering for such an early morning.
😊☕
Great offering for such an early morning.
😊☕
Why thank you, tommycat, for the trilogy, and for your embrace of this early morning ode of mine. It would not have come out in this way if it were the middle of the day.
10th Apr 2017 12:29pm
10th Apr 2017 2:46pm
10th Apr 2017 6:27pm
So lovely, Jade, twin cups,
shared in seperate places, yet never truly seperated.
Sweet tea, indeed...
shared in seperate places, yet never truly seperated.
Sweet tea, indeed...
10th Apr 2017 6:55pm
11th Apr 2017 00:55am
A cup of tea to make one ponder.... You take one of life's small pleasures and make it sublime. Thanks for the sip...
11th Apr 2017 1:03am
Anonymous
11th Apr 2017 5:42am
i think my single origin blend of Kenyan beans is making me miss out on something... must be the tea leaves steeping you in such wonderment.
a beautiful write jadey
xx
a beautiful write jadey
xx
11th Apr 2017 7:17am
I'm honored for your confirmation as a devotee of tea drinking, dear Katja. There are so many variants of tea, like the comment left earlier by Hepcat61, who mentions several of his choices by name. xx
15th Apr 2017 2:17am
The rhyming felt a bit rough in some places. but I really like the personal atmosphere of requited love, as well as the strong tea symbol and metaphors.
15th Apr 2017 2:51pm
My thanks, sir, for your input. Actually, there is no strict rhyme scheme in this particular piece. I just wrote it as it came to me - as the ends of each of the lines fell in the order they did. What was consistent was the syllabic count throughout every line. I appreciate you sharing what you embraced about my write.
