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Bedazzle
'Twas when he saw her flutter by
A shadow fresh from her cocoon
The spiral speak of butterfly
A flashing psychedelic swoon
And soon she would bedazzle him
By whisper'd soft her wing'ed love
Her silver trails in garden dim
'Neath canopy of limbs above
A-quake, a-quivered Romeo
To stalk his Monarch Juliet
Viceroy, Skipper, Crescentspot
Nor Marblewing to hold her yet
The common Nymph he calls her not
This Painted Lady, Chalk Hill Blue
No Satyr, Emerald, Meadowlark
Nor Sulfur, Milkweed, Metalmark
Thus through the phases of the night
Each twist and turn emits their spark
Such faerie queen designed, delight
Her starry wingspread orbits near
He fair takes in her powdered scent
This moth's exquisite presence here
He follows her in moonlit gleam
His passion-spent his destiny
She's long desired in his dreams
Till final breath in ecstasy.
April 2 (NaPoWriMo 2017)
Copyright©️2017-2018 Jade Pandora. All Rights Reserved.
A shadow fresh from her cocoon
The spiral speak of butterfly
A flashing psychedelic swoon
And soon she would bedazzle him
By whisper'd soft her wing'ed love
Her silver trails in garden dim
'Neath canopy of limbs above
A-quake, a-quivered Romeo
To stalk his Monarch Juliet
Viceroy, Skipper, Crescentspot
Nor Marblewing to hold her yet
The common Nymph he calls her not
This Painted Lady, Chalk Hill Blue
No Satyr, Emerald, Meadowlark
Nor Sulfur, Milkweed, Metalmark
Thus through the phases of the night
Each twist and turn emits their spark
Such faerie queen designed, delight
Her starry wingspread orbits near
He fair takes in her powdered scent
This moth's exquisite presence here
He follows her in moonlit gleam
His passion-spent his destiny
She's long desired in his dreams
Till final breath in ecstasy.
April 2 (NaPoWriMo 2017)
Copyright©️2017-2018 Jade Pandora. All Rights Reserved.
Published 2nd Apr 2017
| Edited 30th May 2018
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2nd Apr 2017 10:16am
Why thank you dear one, you're so kind. During the WriMo, the entries will take the reader on a roller coaster journey.
6th Apr 2017 9:57am
Anonymous
2nd Apr 2017 11:05am
swooned at those opening lines
absolutely gorgeous imagery throughout jadey
xo
absolutely gorgeous imagery throughout jadey
xo
2nd Apr 2017 11:45am
2nd Apr 2017 12:20pm
Dear Sage, I thank you so much despite all the other things you attend to, to visit me here to express your appreciation & support. x
2nd Apr 2017 1:00pm
2nd Apr 2017 2:40pm
2nd Apr 2017 12:29pm
Bedazzling piece!;) Love the mystical feel this brings, great piece!
~anonshadow😏
~anonshadow😏
2nd Apr 2017 12:42pm
Ahh thank you, Anon, for sharing this with me - and yes, there's mystical effects afloat here.
2nd Apr 2017 1:03pm
2nd Apr 2017 2:41pm
2nd Apr 2017 2:17pm
The spiral speak of butterfly
A flashing psychedelic swoon
And soon she would bedazzle him
By whisper'd soft her wing'ed love
I love those couplets especially and, of course, the ending couplet! What a delighted way to pass...
(and am instructed by your handling of the WriMo - I will emulate)
tom cat
A flashing psychedelic swoon
And soon she would bedazzle him
By whisper'd soft her wing'ed love
I love those couplets especially and, of course, the ending couplet! What a delighted way to pass...
(and am instructed by your handling of the WriMo - I will emulate)
tom cat
2nd Apr 2017 3:06pm
As each day goes by this month in the middle of the WriMo's glare, results will have us riding tidal waves! Thank you, dear tomcat!
23rd Jun 2018 7:02pm
the lack of punctuation made this confusing to read. I like the fantasy, even in stanzas 7 - 10.
Thank you, sir, I’m glad you like the fantasy.
As for lack of punctuation, it’s usually a well-known given that in such cases, the line breaks & couplet stanzas I use here are tailored to indicate to the reader where the emphasis & subtleties & pauses lie.
As for lack of punctuation, it’s usually a well-known given that in such cases, the line breaks & couplet stanzas I use here are tailored to indicate to the reader where the emphasis & subtleties & pauses lie.
