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Renga: Sensual Rain
through the rain falling
we chase around apple trees
our bounty bears fruit
tonight with our clothes
drip-drying in the bathtub
distant thunder lulls
new rain arriving—
heartbeats of night passion pause
as we both listen
through blinds lightning's flash
zebra stripes on naked flesh
we're each other's prey
a voyeur's phase ebbs
while wind gusts part swollen clouds
and lovers' thunder
moments before sleep
when all things are possible
our fingers touch rain
Published 22nd Feb 2017
| Edited 18th Sep 2018
Author's Note
Renga = linked Senryu/
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22nd Feb 2017 10:36pm
Could visualise this as a unified story of a passionate night, favourite verse:
through blinds lightning's flash
zebra stripes on naked flesh
we're each other's prey
through blinds lightning's flash
zebra stripes on naked flesh
we're each other's prey
22nd Feb 2017 10:55pm
Thank you, Solomon, for the honor of your visit, read & share. I keep adding to the set (renga = linked senryu) as I get more into it.
23rd Feb 2017 6:35am
That reminds me of love scenes in some movies set against a background of dramatic weather, eg Body Heat.
23rd Feb 2017 9:00am
22nd Feb 2017 11:52pm
23rd Feb 2017 3:28am
Aahh thanks so much, Tim, I'm glad to know this. I also always enjoy when a reader has their favorites.
22nd Feb 2017 11:58pm
23rd Feb 2017 3:39am
new rain arriving—
heartbeats of night passion pause
as we both listen
a voyeur's phase ebbs
while wind gusts part swollen clouds
and lovers' thunder
moments before sleep
when all things are possible
our fingers touch rain
The feel of rain, the parting of swollen clouds, the pause waiting for the storm to break... to weather the rainy night, passionately, in breaking storms...
How better to spend one's life...
❤❤🌧🌩🌧❤❤
RL
heartbeats of night passion pause
as we both listen
a voyeur's phase ebbs
while wind gusts part swollen clouds
and lovers' thunder
moments before sleep
when all things are possible
our fingers touch rain
The feel of rain, the parting of swollen clouds, the pause waiting for the storm to break... to weather the rainy night, passionately, in breaking storms...
How better to spend one's life...
❤❤🌧🌩🌧❤❤
RL
17th May 2017 6:35pm
the numbers don't seem too necessary, and the definitoon of Renga could be better as a footnote below the poem. but again, i really like your poetic mix of weather with sensuality.
