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Gravity
my head’s in a daze
feels like I'm in space
a drug that's killing me
but when I try to leave
you pull me in like gravity
I believed I was so grounded
suddenly I'm up with the stars
my mind's a bit misty
thoughts all twisted up
not knowing my right from wrong
once I look into those eyes
I'm completely paralyzed
still to be bended to your will
your command’s my pleasure
whatever the deeds
your body tells of wonders
curves waiting to be explored
with my hands, or my mouth
reducing me to an animal
seeking our building desires
this can only end in tragedy
still I dive in so careless
the pull’s just too strong
your touch too addictive
without it I’m just a wreak
feels like I'm in space
a drug that's killing me
but when I try to leave
you pull me in like gravity
I believed I was so grounded
suddenly I'm up with the stars
my mind's a bit misty
thoughts all twisted up
not knowing my right from wrong
once I look into those eyes
I'm completely paralyzed
still to be bended to your will
your command’s my pleasure
whatever the deeds
your body tells of wonders
curves waiting to be explored
with my hands, or my mouth
reducing me to an animal
seeking our building desires
this can only end in tragedy
still I dive in so careless
the pull’s just too strong
your touch too addictive
without it I’m just a wreak
Published 20th Feb 2017
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20th Feb 2017 2:36pm
Definitely a favorite!
I can't pick a favorite line, but wow... that last stanza...
"this can only end in tragedy" > how many time people have told me this!
But... I'm a hopeless romantic and choose passion over safety and adventure over stability...
Awesomeness, my friend :-)
I can't pick a favorite line, but wow... that last stanza...
"this can only end in tragedy" > how many time people have told me this!
But... I'm a hopeless romantic and choose passion over safety and adventure over stability...
Awesomeness, my friend :-)
22nd Feb 2017 10:20am
I think a lot of us do. The heart is a stupid thing... haha 😂 Thanks my friend. Hug for you 🤗And a rose 🌹 because you said you don't get many flowers 😉
20th Feb 2017 3:34pm
I'm with my little sister Duende on this one. Too many great lines to choose from. From the sound of you, you are ass over ears for her. :)
Willow
Willow
22nd Feb 2017 10:21am
I should of used "ass over ears" for the title... hehe 😁 Thanks my lovely friend 🤗
20th Feb 2017 10:26pm
22nd Feb 2017 10:23am
Hey Crims 😁 I'm a passionate man. I really wanted to show that first love kind of feeling. Thanks for enjoying
21st Feb 2017 00:03am
You've just put into words what many have felt but few can express. Wonderful write:)
22nd Feb 2017 10:25am
I'm glad those feelings showed. The helpless love feeling. Thanks so much for reading 😁
21st Feb 2017 9:35pm
'I believed I was so grounded
suddenly I'm up with the stars
my mind's a bit misty
thoughts all twisted up
not knowing my right from wrong'
^This is me all over and oh how love can make us crazy! 😂
suddenly I'm up with the stars
my mind's a bit misty
thoughts all twisted up
not knowing my right from wrong'
^This is me all over and oh how love can make us crazy! 😂
22nd Feb 2017 10:26am
Hey, friend 😁 It's been awhile so you get a huge hug 🤗 Love has made me so crazy at times.. haha Thanks for enjoying
22nd Feb 2017 7:18pm
Awwww I love your cyber hugs 😁 I'm sure we have all felt a little love crazy at times and you're welcome I have missed your writes!
24th Mar 2017 9:15am
I really feel like you do and all i can say is that its all gone Pete Tong. I think you are my saviour. Keep up the awsomne work and dont ever change stay with the stars. The Redeemer is part of a foreign injection and we all know him so well now. Take care babe.
25th Mar 2017 6:07am
20th Aug 2017 1:45am
I loved it, something about the word curves you have used in a couple of your poems, is that the dangerous bit? The curves? I want the best for you I'm a good fan and I get inspired by you, I relate to you, something so beautiful like this poem can maybe turn into tragedy < as you say and it is sad to think like that but I'm just like you, is it gravity or the curves that form gravity?I wan to know more, do another one about love please, wanted:)
