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my cold dead heart
my cold dead heart
remembers to forget the melodies
we once hid inside
my lips betray me however
and i make porcupined air bubbles
of the lyrics where you slipped on my skin
i forget to remember
there are holes in the walls
where memories used to hang
with promises of forever
as the dirge plays on
I don't ask for salvation
nor forgiveness
just the sweet wet crackle
of my showering on your grave
as you watch
Written for the DUP competition of the same name
Accepted for publication 08 03 2017 by mgv2 La petite mort (France)
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Re. my cold dead heart
I was hoping is would find its way to your poetrylogue. This poem was the clear winner in the comp, but I'm bias, because you're my big brother.
Loved the imagery throughout, especially the holes in the walls where memories use to hang [I was visualising holes the size of fists] and the pissing on the grave... damn fine poetry, you cold heartless bastard.
Loved the imagery throughout, especially the holes in the walls where memories use to hang [I was visualising holes the size of fists] and the pissing on the grave... damn fine poetry, you cold heartless bastard.
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20th Feb 2017 8:05pm
It helped that I wrote this in the dark and half asleep ... some of Rihanna's more bitter songs helped me paint the landscape for this ... More importantly your piece (the true winner to me) was a great springboard to get me going ... thanks as always Brotha mine.
Re. my cold dead heart
20th Feb 2017 1:29pm
it's wise not to expect things
that won't be granted anyway;
only the dreamless sleep where the heart lies resting.
sterling...
that won't be granted anyway;
only the dreamless sleep where the heart lies resting.
sterling...
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20th Feb 2017 8:09pm
only the dreamless sleep where the heart lies resting. sterling... Your insight, priceless ... as I was lying between two worlds as I wrote this Thank you for your time in reading this John.
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20th Feb 2017 2:09pm
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20th Feb 2017 8:11pm
lol ... don't know if I'm truly back, but it felt good to write something besides a research paper or project proposal ... xo
Re. my cold dead heart
Mo Chara...
in this piece i sense a bitter pain of betrayal.... one cloaked in coping anger--your vivid, visual imagery making it so palpable.
Intense...impressive ink--Indeed !
( Glad you're back...and what a return!! )
in this piece i sense a bitter pain of betrayal.... one cloaked in coping anger--your vivid, visual imagery making it so palpable.
Intense...impressive ink--Indeed !
( Glad you're back...and what a return!! )
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20th Feb 2017 8:14pm
Enchanted One ... So glad you read it and felt what I was trying to convey ... Your kind words always make me smile Mo Chara xo
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21st Feb 2017 3:34am
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22nd Feb 2017 7:10am
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21st Feb 2017 9:23pm
A dark poem it is Lo and the picture painted in the last stanza...well...
The line that stands out for me is... 'I forget to remember' ... so powerful :-)
The line that stands out for me is... 'I forget to remember' ... so powerful :-)
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22nd Feb 2017 7:16am
Thank you sweet Kate for the RL add ... I'm glad you enjoyed word play in that line juxtaposed against - remember to forget - and the last stanza xo
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9th Mar 2017 4:48am
my wolf brother, I am so sorry I missed this. It was an excellent find. Great write!
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10th Mar 2017 7:29am
If you like it then I know I've truly done something (write) ... I hope to get back to reading and writing here more regularly again ... yours is certainly a voice that's always inspired me, especially with ink like this Salud
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26th Mar 2017 5:12pm
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27th Mar 2017 2:05am
Thank you dear Miss Chiyo ... slowly but surely I'm trying to get back home.
Re. my cold dead heart
31st Mar 2017 12:10pm
"There are wholes in the walls..."
That stanza is so....sad. And it is a perfect image. Well done!
That stanza is so....sad. And it is a perfect image. Well done!
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31st Mar 2017 10:58pm
You certainly have a poetic eye because I actually started with that stanza written as a haiku ... ... then I decided to build around it ... Thank you for reading and commenting
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31st Mar 2017 4:48pm
Time has only served to solidify your talents. This is fucking good, Lobo and I'm sure you know it. Be proud you can write so well. I'm proud to read it. (:
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31st Mar 2017 11:02pm
Thank you finding this with your kind words Lost one ... I wrote it in a time of sorrow .., the release and your comments have brightened me Thank you
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