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on the outskirts of her mind...
she says so you have
utterly wasted today just
walking around the city
but then I have always
thought of you as something
of a peripheral figure...
Published 10th Jan 2017
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Anonymous
10th Jan 2017 2:23pm
At least she's thinking about you. Nice write.
10th Jan 2017 11:02pm
10th Jan 2017 7:18pm
Aha. Peripheral is good; it means you're always there in the corner of her eye (whether you are or not).
10th Jan 2017 11:03pm
11th Jan 2017 4:16am
This is a quietly moving poem; you have a similar gift for evoking great depth in small spaces as Richard Brautigan, the American poet, author of "Love Poem", quoted here in its entirety:
"It's so nice
to wake up in the morning
all alone
and not have to tell somebody
you love them
when you don't love them
any more."
"It's so nice
to wake up in the morning
all alone
and not have to tell somebody
you love them
when you don't love them
any more."
11th Jan 2017 10:23pm
