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Knitting Apologies
Yarn rolled across linoleum
Unraveling by the second
Desperately trying
To wind it together
Again and yet
Once fraying
Can it really be expected
To travel through the needle eye?
Grasping yarn in clenched
Teeth, pushing
together once more,
Seeking to make
A sweater to keep you warm
So you can mend, so we can amend --
Amen.
Unraveling by the second
Desperately trying
To wind it together
Again and yet
Once fraying
Can it really be expected
To travel through the needle eye?
Grasping yarn in clenched
Teeth, pushing
together once more,
Seeking to make
A sweater to keep you warm
So you can mend, so we can amend --
Amen.
Published 10th Dec 2016
| Edited 24th Oct 2018
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10th Dec 2016 10:30pm
11th Dec 2016 5:46am
A beautiful bagatelle delightful Do you mean 'wound 'in the first stanza ?I agree with eswaller.
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- Edited 11th Dec 2016 5:10pm
11th Dec 2016 5:08pm
Go with "wind".
Desperately trying to wind it together = present action
Desperately wound together = past action
Desperately trying to + wound = statements at odds with one another
Desperately trying to wind it together = present action
Desperately wound together = past action
Desperately trying to + wound = statements at odds with one another
11th Dec 2016 6:24pm
You're right, I should have caught that!! Thank you for the good editing eye
