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Danaid
My lover, victim of my alluring feminine Gin, thrust your hungry lips upon my tender fell. On abraded knee I tremble at your demand. A luminescent nude, a pristine marbled masterpiece made violette effigy in your lascivious hands, I worship at your feet.
Carnal passions are my curse, and I bathe in your cerise affections, the heat of it magnificent on my maculate skin. Just as Mistress Camille was captured in exquisite immortal beauty by the masterful hand of Rodin, I become.
I claim your emblazened phallus between my delicately parted lips, soothing the savage I call from your depths. Forcefully, you assault my pallet, an impetus attack, and I am intoxicated by agony's release. My chatté is awash with the degrading glaze of orgasmic thresholds as it polishes my alabaster skin.
Beauty mirrors art, and love is no exception. In my passiveness I offer my body, my heart, wearing your mark among my flaws, symbol of an obsession that keeps me on my knees. It blinds our desperate loneliness. What you have of me was never stolen; it was yours the first time we loved.
( artwork by Auguste Rodin )
Carnal passions are my curse, and I bathe in your cerise affections, the heat of it magnificent on my maculate skin. Just as Mistress Camille was captured in exquisite immortal beauty by the masterful hand of Rodin, I become.
I claim your emblazened phallus between my delicately parted lips, soothing the savage I call from your depths. Forcefully, you assault my pallet, an impetus attack, and I am intoxicated by agony's release. My chatté is awash with the degrading glaze of orgasmic thresholds as it polishes my alabaster skin.
Beauty mirrors art, and love is no exception. In my passiveness I offer my body, my heart, wearing your mark among my flaws, symbol of an obsession that keeps me on my knees. It blinds our desperate loneliness. What you have of me was never stolen; it was yours the first time we loved.
( artwork by Auguste Rodin )
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Re. Danaid
28th Nov 2016 1:03pm
poetry mirrors art. beautiful & provocative, Kas;
I embrace the carnality, the violette Chatte, the sensual sculpture,
& the Woman it becomes...
I embrace the carnality, the violette Chatte, the sensual sculpture,
& the Woman it becomes...
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Re: Re. Danaid
28th Nov 2016 8:00pm
And like poetry, love becomes art. Something to be embraced and cherished.
Thank you, John, for embracing it with me...
Thank you, John, for embracing it with me...
Re. Danaid
28th Nov 2016 1:48pm
Kasai, you don't simply write erotic words, you paint masterpiece art with every stroke of the key. I am in awe.
Willow
Willow
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Re: Re. Danaid
28th Nov 2016 8:05pm
So sweet, Willow, you flatter me with such a wonderful comment.
Thank you so much...
Thank you so much...
Re. Danaid
28th Nov 2016 1:49pm
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28th Nov 2016 10:21pm
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Anonymous
28th Nov 2016 3:42pm
This is truly breathtaking. 💓
Every word paints such a sensual beautiful picture of true art.
A masterpiece indeed.
Every word paints such a sensual beautiful picture of true art.
A masterpiece indeed.
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Re: Re. Danaid
28th Nov 2016 10:23pm
Masterpiece is quite a lovely compliment, thank you for seeing the artistic symbolism here.
Very kind of you...
Very kind of you...
Re. Danaid
28th Nov 2016 3:47pm
Thank you, you have expanded my vocabulary in wonderful fashion. Love is an amazing journey.
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Re: Re. Danaid
28th Nov 2016 10:27pm
I always put effort into expanding my vocabulary, the research behind it is a nice challenge.
I'm glad you enjoyed the journey...
I'm glad you enjoyed the journey...
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28th Nov 2016 4:36pm
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Re: Re. Danaid
28th Nov 2016 10:30pm
I really liked the idea of art transformed into poetic form here.
Thank you for the amazing comment...
Thank you for the amazing comment...
Re. Danaid
29th Nov 2016 1:33am
I like how tastefully written this erotic poem is, it's a work of art in its delicately handled form, however it is not too delicate in its story to have impact ...
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Re: Re. Danaid
29th Nov 2016 3:47am
Thanks for the feedback, PR, I really wasn't sure about the artistic expression with this one. It's good to know it had an impact...
Re. Danaid
29th Nov 2016 5:08am
I've never been a huge fan of the adjective "alabaster" in poetry, and your style frequently threatens to become too rich and thereby topple over into silliness, given the erotic subject matter, but all in all you keep the train on the tracks, and offer some very lovely, and very, ahem, "stirring" (nudge nudge wink wink) images. The use of "savage" and "agony" is exquisite; I've always loved employment of the bestial and painfully urgent in erotic literature; the way you play with power between the lovers is extremely skillful and well-judged. The comparisons to sculpture were great as well, adding a layered and thematic quality to the poem. Thank you very much for the read.
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Re: Re. Danaid
29th Nov 2016 10:28am
Your critiques are always so informative, a wealth of useful knowledge as well as a great learning expirience. The positive feedback and the useful tips are so helpful.
I thank you for the input and amazing comment, nice of you to take the time...
I thank you for the input and amazing comment, nice of you to take the time...
Re. Danaid
29th Nov 2016 7:36am
Your choice of words always leaves me in awe... in admiration...
You are truly unique in the way you write!
"Beauty mirrors art, and love is no exception" > love this line!
Amazing ink, Kasai!
You are truly unique in the way you write!
"Beauty mirrors art, and love is no exception" > love this line!
Amazing ink, Kasai!
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Re: Re. Danaid
29th Nov 2016 9:04am
That is so sweet of you, Duende, truly it is.
The evolution of my poetry has been an interesting journey, and the outcome is unknown, but I'm glad I could share it with you.
Thank you for the kindness...
The evolution of my poetry has been an interesting journey, and the outcome is unknown, but I'm glad I could share it with you.
Thank you for the kindness...
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29th Nov 2016 9:20am
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29th Nov 2016 9:56am