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Whispering Pines
A toilsome cloud has settled on the valley floor, not even the concrete can defy its weight. Gravity pulls it down and it seeps in through the cracks, swelling beneath the surace where I cannot see, but I know. I know it's there because I can feel it underfoot, shifting and writhing like a wounded soul, desperately trying to escape.
Escape is just a luxury and I am much, too small to set it free.
A new chapter is written and I realize now that this abandoned town is just smoke and mirrors. This place I grew up in, this place I've never left and once thought to be beautiful, has gone cold. There is no beauty here, no sun to warm the blacktop or make the wildflowers grow, because beauty comes from within and mine was lost long ago.
Odious, is my aching heart and it withers in the dark.
You cannot burn a bridge that was never built and you cannot harvest a field of root and stone. When the ancient pines fall, The Bald Mountain will keep it a quietly hidden secret, watching helplessly as The Green River carves a destructive path through the valley. By then, I will have burned away the last of love's desperate hope, and I will let the waters cover me.
I refuse to call it beautiful.
I won't.
Escape is just a luxury and I am much, too small to set it free.
A new chapter is written and I realize now that this abandoned town is just smoke and mirrors. This place I grew up in, this place I've never left and once thought to be beautiful, has gone cold. There is no beauty here, no sun to warm the blacktop or make the wildflowers grow, because beauty comes from within and mine was lost long ago.
Odious, is my aching heart and it withers in the dark.
You cannot burn a bridge that was never built and you cannot harvest a field of root and stone. When the ancient pines fall, The Bald Mountain will keep it a quietly hidden secret, watching helplessly as The Green River carves a destructive path through the valley. By then, I will have burned away the last of love's desperate hope, and I will let the waters cover me.
I refuse to call it beautiful.
I won't.
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Re. Whispering Pines
23rd Nov 2016 10:37am
the pines whisper to us, Kas;
if we listen, it's poetry.
the beautiful things linger dolorously in the deepest shadows sometimes,
but they are still beautiful. you write that melancholy beauty...
if we listen, it's poetry.
the beautiful things linger dolorously in the deepest shadows sometimes,
but they are still beautiful. you write that melancholy beauty...
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Re: Re. Whispering Pines
23rd Nov 2016 10:54am
Sometimes they whisper so quietly that it's difficult to hear,
Lost on the breeze.
Poetry and beauty, both elusive at times, but always there.
Thank you, John, such pretty words...
Lost on the breeze.
Poetry and beauty, both elusive at times, but always there.
Thank you, John, such pretty words...
Re. Whispering Pines
23rd Nov 2016 12:57pm
I sense a deep longing and regret from this piece. I rather enjoyed the imagery it created in my head.
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Re: Re. Whispering Pines
23rd Nov 2016 5:53pm
Longing and regret, most definately, you've said it perfectly.
So glad to hear you enjoyed the scenery, thanks for reading me...
So glad to hear you enjoyed the scenery, thanks for reading me...
Re. Whispering Pines
23rd Nov 2016 2:26pm
This has the feel of a soul that needs to breathe deeply of fresh air, new life. You create such beautifully alive landscapes, despite the feel of hopelessness that they sometimes have skimming the surfaces. One cannot read you and not FEEL...that is beauty, Kasai!
Willow
Willow
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Re: Re. Whispering Pines
23rd Nov 2016 5:57pm
Ah yes, new life and fresh air, such a lovely thought it is.
How wonderful to know my words were felt, as well as read,
Thank you so much for the always, beautiful comments, sweet willow...
How wonderful to know my words were felt, as well as read,
Thank you so much for the always, beautiful comments, sweet willow...
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Anonymous
23rd Nov 2016 3:36pm
Breathless yearning is felt so deeply in this piece. Longing for anew. Your imagery and expression is truly captivating.
My heart raced through this journey. You take us there...with you.
Beautifully written, lovely one 💓
My heart raced through this journey. You take us there...with you.
Beautifully written, lovely one 💓
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Re: Re. Whispering Pines
23rd Nov 2016 6:02pm
So happy to take you on this journey with me, WTH
I do so enjoy the company and very kind words.
Thank you for joining me, keeping me company for awhile...
I do so enjoy the company and very kind words.
Thank you for joining me, keeping me company for awhile...
Re. Whispering Pines
23rd Nov 2016 10:22pm
This is a stunning write, Kasai.
You cannot burn a bridge that was never built and you cannot harvest a field of root and stone.
I was already in awe of the imagery, but that stopped me cold in my breath.
You may not call it beautiful, but I did.
You cannot burn a bridge that was never built and you cannot harvest a field of root and stone.
I was already in awe of the imagery, but that stopped me cold in my breath.
You may not call it beautiful, but I did.
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Re: Re. Whispering Pines
23rd Nov 2016 11:05pm
I am so humbled by your lovely comments, Ahavati, means a lot coming from such a talented lady.
Beautiful, is an RL addition by an exceptional poetess,
Thanks for making me smile today...
Beautiful, is an RL addition by an exceptional poetess,
Thanks for making me smile today...
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24th Nov 2016 8:57am
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24th Nov 2016 9:15am
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25th Nov 2016 3:05pm
I'm reading The House of the Seven Gables by Nathaniel Hawthorne at the moment, and this prose poem reminds me of its dense, Dark Romantic style. The equation of the town and the weather to the heart of the narrator is a good example of pathetic fallacy, and the arrangement and wording of the last two lines evoke a deep sense of inner turmoil and questioning. Thank you very much for the read, Kasai.
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Re: Re. Whispering Pines
25th Nov 2016 10:42pm
You leave such wonderfully, in depth comments on my pages complete with comparisons to other literary works you've read. I'm always so humbled that you've taken the time to share your thoughts, and to be on the RL of such a great writer means a lot.
Thank you for the kind words...
Thank you for the kind words...
Re. Whispering Pines
26th Nov 2016 8:57am
relentless write and phenomal crafting
no one hears the tree fall
Beautiful imagery. desolate
no one hears the tree fall
Beautiful imagery. desolate
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Re: Re. Whispering Pines
26th Nov 2016 9:49am
Exactly, but it definitely makes a noise, and the mountains still know.
Great that you picked up on that and thanks for the kind words...
Great that you picked up on that and thanks for the kind words...