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Painting
Today I painted a picture
A portrait in water colour
Despite the weakness of the paint
The colours felt strong and vivid
Mixed with deep greys and black
A chiselled jaw line, staring eyes
Glassy, looking almost tear filled
They were Crockadilic tear filled
He was bereft of any sadness
Instead he was full of anger and rage
Murderous intent and a deep desire
To cause much pain through torture
And bouts of extreme violence
Deep brush strokes created a grimace
I could hear his teeth grinding
And behind the eyes, oh behind the eyes
Such pain and grief, such internal screaming
A blatant desire for ultimate revenge
To dish out ten times of what had been received
To take such pleasure from that thought
I almost want to give him a smile
But he clearly has nothing to smile about
Life has dealt him nothing but blows
Nothing but negative unforeseen punches,
Kicks, slaps, scrawled into his face by brush
His eyes follow me about the room
So much so I was scared to turn my back
This time the canvas speaks volumes
This time the canvas doesn’t lie
This portrait of a would be assassin
This portrait of a would be taker of souls
This picture of a very dark man
This picture of evil incarnate
Is a self portrait
A portrait in water colour
Despite the weakness of the paint
The colours felt strong and vivid
Mixed with deep greys and black
A chiselled jaw line, staring eyes
Glassy, looking almost tear filled
They were Crockadilic tear filled
He was bereft of any sadness
Instead he was full of anger and rage
Murderous intent and a deep desire
To cause much pain through torture
And bouts of extreme violence
Deep brush strokes created a grimace
I could hear his teeth grinding
And behind the eyes, oh behind the eyes
Such pain and grief, such internal screaming
A blatant desire for ultimate revenge
To dish out ten times of what had been received
To take such pleasure from that thought
I almost want to give him a smile
But he clearly has nothing to smile about
Life has dealt him nothing but blows
Nothing but negative unforeseen punches,
Kicks, slaps, scrawled into his face by brush
His eyes follow me about the room
So much so I was scared to turn my back
This time the canvas speaks volumes
This time the canvas doesn’t lie
This portrait of a would be assassin
This portrait of a would be taker of souls
This picture of a very dark man
This picture of evil incarnate
Is a self portrait
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Re. Painting
13th Oct 2016 11:52pm
David such a powerful write it leaped of the page stunning me with the truth of it..
love you..
xo Brenda
love you..
xo Brenda
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14th Oct 2016 00:35am
thank you Brenda - I have found it hard getting back into my writing - hopefully I am back to almost normal (lol)
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14th Oct 2016 00:35am
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14th Oct 2016 00:47am
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15th Oct 2016 3:45am
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14th Oct 2016 7:37am
Welcome back Dear Friend!!! Gosh you made me worried, it's well over 4 weeks matey since you went away! A sigh of relief to see you back,and back with a bang!
This indeed is a powerful narrative of a portrait of self both interior and exterior . Delivered as only you can.
Missed your company!
KDAmB
This indeed is a powerful narrative of a portrait of self both interior and exterior . Delivered as only you can.
Missed your company!
KDAmB
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Re: Re. Painting
15th Oct 2016 3:48am
thank you so much for your kindness - I was away in total for about 8 weeks and had my other leg amputated and experienced a few complications - I am still healing and almost back to what I call normal :-)
I can assure you I missed your company too :-)
I can assure you I missed your company too :-)
Re. Painting
14th Oct 2016 5:31pm
This is my favorite poem I have read on here so far. It is griping and powerful, I love it.
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Re: Re. Painting
15th Oct 2016 3:50am
that's such a big comment, I can't thank you enough - I am so glad you enjoyed it
:-)
:-)
Re. Painting
15th Oct 2016 3:44am
The brush is lying to you. This isn't a self portrait, it's a depiction of one part of who you are. Your dark side does not define you. Don't forget that.
This poem reminded me of the many times I've been consumed in darkness and ate the deception spoonfed to me. Funny how it tastes like truth in those moments though, isn't it? I feel the depression, sorry you're going through it, it makes for great poetry however.
This poem reminded me of the many times I've been consumed in darkness and ate the deception spoonfed to me. Funny how it tastes like truth in those moments though, isn't it? I feel the depression, sorry you're going through it, it makes for great poetry however.
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15th Oct 2016 3:58am
Last 8 weeks = last leg amputation + urinary infection + Post operative delirium + increased PTSD symptoms + Melancholy = Great poetry :-)
ty for more wise words :-)
ty for more wise words :-)
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15th Oct 2016 5:29am
Yeah... all pretty rough stuff, sucks you had to go through all that, and I completely understand how a depressive state can result from all that. It's a strange thing how deep pain or deep darkness can make for some of our best work. But also quite nice because sometimes it can be the sprinkle of positivity we need. :)
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2nd Mar 2017 3:13am
PTSD sucks royally sometimes. Hope its not always a monkey on your back. <3
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2nd Mar 2017 11:17am
Just can't seem to shake it unless I take prescribed zombie drugs. I choose the trade of, of more pain and PTSD for the ability to feel and function - may seem strange but, for me, it is worth it :-)
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2nd Mar 2017 11:57pm
I know how tat goes. I also suffer. Sometimes the meds work, sometimes they do not. love to you. <3
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Re. Painting
2nd Mar 2017 3:10am
Tis great indeed,David. Your words reach me. Thanks for being you and sharing. <3
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2nd Mar 2017 11:20am
I hope the words reached you in a positive way - that would be my goal :-) yhank you again so much for reading and commenting - it means a lot :-)