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'Un-Take my Heart...'
*yea, heard Toni Braxton's classic
n' it instantly sent me into a beautiful
but unfortunately, sad place
Soooooo...*
Untake my heart...
take back the dreams
u bled when u said our
love n'ver end...
Untie these fears
release them to sear
the tears of lost once again...
Unbreak that hold, I want
so very much to flee,
n' please don't say
you ever, ever loved me...
Untake me,
don't make me
I beg thee,
UNTAKE me...
Without you
I feel
that cold
embrace, this empty
space without light
is exactly right
where I...
Burn
Eternal
Loneliness
Over
Never
Givin' in to love's psalm...
n' it instantly sent me into a beautiful
but unfortunately, sad place
Soooooo...*
Untake my heart...
take back the dreams
u bled when u said our
love n'ver end...
Untie these fears
release them to sear
the tears of lost once again...
Unbreak that hold, I want
so very much to flee,
n' please don't say
you ever, ever loved me...
Untake me,
don't make me
I beg thee,
UNTAKE me...
Without you
I feel
that cold
embrace, this empty
space without light
is exactly right
where I...
Burn
Eternal
Loneliness
Over
Never
Givin' in to love's psalm...
Published 29th Sep 2016
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29th Sep 2016 2:11pm
These are some heartfelt words you've laid out here. So tragically beautiful. Love the BELONG at the end...counterpoint to what you're missing. Brilliantly written, heart aching to read. Hugs
29th Sep 2016 2:44pm
29th Sep 2016 4:03pm
I feel your pain from the aftershocks of the love game. It can literally drive you insane.
Thanks bro. You remind me that it just me as a man who knows n expresses
pain from love, though I know women
seem to think we don't feel much at all. Appreciate u much
pain from love, though I know women
seem to think we don't feel much at all. Appreciate u much
29th Sep 2016 4:16pm
29th Sep 2016 11:24pm
Well now you know what yours does to me lol thank you my sweetness, truly n always
29th Sep 2016 5:18pm
Love it! You should definitely set this to a voice-over with 'Un-break My Heart instrumental, Poe. A poetic-serenade at it's finest.
Lovely ink, with a melancholy ache.
Lovely ink, with a melancholy ache.
29th Sep 2016 11:27pm
Definitely will consider it, although
I'm not able to at the moment ( no storage space on my phone) n I'd need to find the instrumental as well :)
Thanks my sweet Rain, ur pouring of support is wonderfully appreciated :)
I'm not able to at the moment ( no storage space on my phone) n I'd need to find the instrumental as well :)
Thanks my sweet Rain, ur pouring of support is wonderfully appreciated :)
29th Sep 2016 7:43pm
All I could think was: Eros the bittersweet!
This is such a heartfelt poem, especially because of all the un-words!
Untake me,
don't make me
I beg thee,
UNTAKE me... I feel you on this one, dear Poetik! If only...
This is such a heartfelt poem, especially because of all the un-words!
Untake me,
don't make me
I beg thee,
UNTAKE me... I feel you on this one, dear Poetik! If only...
29th Sep 2016 11:30pm
Unbelievable u are... Lol
Anywho, thank you my dearest I'm grateful for your thoughts n as always appreciate your continued support :)
Anywho, thank you my dearest I'm grateful for your thoughts n as always appreciate your continued support :)
You sure do know how the plaster on
the effect of your mindful words
damn it.. . this is sad - but I so love
me some Toni, she has gotten me
through plenty of sh**
hugs to your brokenness.. ., but I
figure it'll hurt a little less each time
-Howlings
the effect of your mindful words
damn it.. . this is sad - but I so love
me some Toni, she has gotten me
through plenty of sh**
hugs to your brokenness.. ., but I
figure it'll hurt a little less each time
-Howlings
30th Sep 2016 1:25am
Hey I got an idea, let's get together n drown our sorrows in one another... lol n yea thank you so much for your sweet support :)
30th Sep 2016 4:08am
"Untie these fears
release them to sear
the tears of lost once again" oh wow Poetik truly felt that part ..i guess in life and love there will always be givers and takers..healers and heartbreakers and lots of bittersweet in between..i enjoyed this immensely!!
release them to sear
the tears of lost once again" oh wow Poetik truly felt that part ..i guess in life and love there will always be givers and takers..healers and heartbreakers and lots of bittersweet in between..i enjoyed this immensely!!
30th Sep 2016 9:51am
In life you're right, problem seems to always be too many takers n not enough givers... Thank you my sweetheart I appreciate your support
greatly n always :)
greatly n always :)
30th Sep 2016 11:08pm
Aww you sound like you could use some affection. 💋💋💋
Ps...Beautiful way to express your experience with love. No matter how heartbreaking...there is still so much undiscovered beauty within truly loving another.
Ps...Beautiful way to express your experience with love. No matter how heartbreaking...there is still so much undiscovered beauty within truly loving another.
30th Sep 2016 11:22pm
Yea well... Thank you for your sweet thoughts n support my dear one. Truly appreciate it :)
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1st Oct 2016 4:55pm
PM!! Like many before me (and I'm sorry for my delay in getting here) this causes lips to pout...vulnerability shown here which itself is actually quite brave...hugs sent to you my friend...
With love - Taryn xoxo
With love - Taryn xoxo
2nd Oct 2016 8:16am
Havin gotten here at all is really the only thing... n I will be always deeply grateful for that... N yea thank you my sweetness for your thoughts n time :)
16th Oct 2016 6:18pm
16th Oct 2016 8:22pm
Thanks dude, yea Toni... Not only is she Fffuuuiiinnneee, but she can sing her sweet booty off too! lol... appreciatd the time n thoughts on my ink. :)
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