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The Real Thing...(Redux)
Into her thoughts...
I Stumble
about the alleys
along rodent majority, and
discarded gum wrappers
against the backdrop of fainted whispers
in the air of yesterdays smiles...
denizens lost 'mongst the bigger picture
metal fire escapes, caress like fingers
clinging
as child does, securely in belief...
passing along as window opens
to another
exit
back to the beginning...
I Stumble
about the alleys
along rodent majority, and
discarded gum wrappers
against the backdrop of fainted whispers
in the air of yesterdays smiles...
denizens lost 'mongst the bigger picture
metal fire escapes, caress like fingers
clinging
as child does, securely in belief...
passing along as window opens
to another
exit
back to the beginning...
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10th Aug 2016 12:30pm
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10th Aug 2016 1:44pm
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10th Aug 2016 1:53pm
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10th Aug 2016 2:06pm
Wow Wonderful Imagery..this was captivating..your mind is an Awesome place to visit..i truly enjoyed!!!
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10th Aug 2016 4:16pm
Aaaawww... Thank u sweetie! I'm grateful for your ever present support always :)
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10th Aug 2016 3:22pm
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10th Aug 2016 4:18pm
Precious lady, u give me big smiles :) thank you so much, truly appreciate u :)
Re. The Real Thing...(Redux)
10th Aug 2016 5:37pm
This ink flows so well PM! The best ones are those where you can close your eyes and truly see/feel what someone is describing. Great write love!!! 💋💋💋
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10th Aug 2016 8:36pm
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10th Aug 2016 11:39pm
It is visceral. It carries a sense of all that is used, lost and trashed and the silent tragedy of it all. Cool brother.
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11th Aug 2016 1:32am
What's so cool is your thoughts on this bro. I'm super flattered by such thoughtful comment :) appreciate you much :)
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Anonymous
11th Aug 2016 3:30am
Hey Poet......doing it differently and I luv it...very creative.......what a romantic feel this has......beautiful......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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11th Aug 2016 8:07pm
Yea well if u know one thing bout me
for certain, I'm always ready to switch things around...I'm grateful for your support always my purple one :)
for certain, I'm always ready to switch things around...I'm grateful for your support always my purple one :)
Re. The Real Thing...(Redux)
Anonymous
11th Aug 2016 7:07am
Wow... you left me mystified with this gem bro... the whole presentation just...wowed me...
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Re: Re. The Real Thing...(Redux)
11th Aug 2016 8:12pm
You wowed me with ur comment! I'm Lovin' how you continue to feed my desire to do more bro. Thank u so much! :)
Re. The Real Thing...(Redux)
11th Aug 2016 8:21am
Your representation of a trip though the alleys of inner thought was descriptively beautiful......
A really great read
A really great read
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12th Aug 2016 4:03pm
Re. The Real Thing...(Redux)
Anonymous
11th Aug 2016 12:39pm
PM......... Is beautiful!!!
Bravooooo!!!
Bravooooo!!!
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12th Aug 2016 4:44pm
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12th Aug 2016 9:49am
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12th Aug 2016 4:46pm
Well ur not wrong but it was a lifetime ago n lead to nothing as usual for me...thank you my friend
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Anonymous
14th Aug 2016 5:17pm
Looovvee it !
Ahhh, mwah mwah
Freckin touch my bones with
this one.
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Ahhh, mwah mwah
Freckin touch my bones with
this one.
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14th Aug 2016 5:38pm