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you look away
pretending you don't see me
but I catch you peeking through your periphery
eyes glaring at me
taking me apart, dissecting my psyche
I know you feel me
*
sending my vibe across the ocean
the white sharks in the sea of self doubt
tearing at my being as it goes
you're not beautiful enough
no talent compared to this man
he'd take you out with his intellect
*
still like a dope phene
I cum for you
in submission to your warrior soul
your poetry has fucked me
leaving a delicious cum stain on my mind
forever marked by your ferocious spirit
*
licking the poetic semen from my thoughts
I spit lust on the page
giving it life
Published 25th Jul 2016
| Edited 26th Jul 2016
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25th Jul 2016 5:04pm
You do have a way of getting my attention, Brenda.
Trashy thoughts and swallowing cum make my "fucking" day!
Trashy thoughts and swallowing cum make my "fucking" day!
25th Jul 2016 5:39pm
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25th Jul 2016 5:08pm
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25th Jul 2016 5:40pm
25th Jul 2016 6:34pm
It's always a pleasure to read your lust Crim, spat on the page or otherwise. This is superbly fierce and eloquent. But these lines, I dunno:
"you're not beautiful enough
no talent compared to this man
he'd take you out with his intellect"
If you're talking to yourself I beg to differ. I think you'd return fire, having a high caliber talent and intellect of your own. Excellent work! Can't figure the title though....
"you're not beautiful enough
no talent compared to this man
he'd take you out with his intellect"
If you're talking to yourself I beg to differ. I think you'd return fire, having a high caliber talent and intellect of your own. Excellent work! Can't figure the title though....
26th Jul 2016 00:50am
thank you graciously Sir Crow.. yeah it's those nasty self doubt sharks appreciate you saying otherwise about me.. as for the title didn't really no what to call this one the squiggly lines are supposed to be seamen lol :)
love Crim
love Crim
Anonymous
25th Jul 2016 6:34pm
Wow. A delicious intense piece!
Sexy as hell!
This is fabulous!
Sexy as hell!
This is fabulous!
26th Jul 2016 00:51am
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26th Jul 2016 00:51am
Anonymous
25th Jul 2016 10:36pm
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26th Jul 2016 00:52am
Anonymous
26th Jul 2016 2:27am
Every line filled with semen and lust.
Which "left a delicious cum stain on my mind"
Love it!
Which "left a delicious cum stain on my mind"
Love it!
27th Jul 2016 00:52am
26th Jul 2016 2:47am
fierce ink - raw and honest, straight from the hope - you are so good at this :-)
love and ehugs - David :-)
love and ehugs - David :-)
26th Jul 2016 9:06am
we mournful male poets, never quite beautiful enough.
clever composition, Crim...
clever composition, Crim...
27th Jul 2016 00:54am
aw John all you poets are magnificent specimens to me..
thank you I cherish your thoughts..
love Crim
thank you I cherish your thoughts..
love Crim
26th Jul 2016 12:55pm
27th Jul 2016 00:54am
26th Jul 2016 2:59pm
Holy Shit! What an incredibly raw and amazing write, Crim.
The honesty is pervasive and I think that when we try to escape
some things, they haunt us.
The honesty is pervasive and I think that when we try to escape
some things, they haunt us.
27th Jul 2016 00:55am
thank you Sage one yes trying to evade this lust just causes me more torment so I write about it..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Anonymous
27th Jul 2016 4:51am
Wow precious Crim......this is breataking.......outstanding!!! I'm lost for words how strong your voice is here yet ever so gentle......tipping my pen in respect and luv to you......purple luv & hugs xo :)
28th Jul 2016 12:47pm
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27th Jul 2016 5:58am
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28th Jul 2016 12:48pm
28th Jul 2016 6:28am
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28th Jul 2016 6:43am
I read this and just wanted to crawl out of my skins!
..my lady loves, I cannot say it enough, I just can't
mess'd me ponders up, it's fucking rippling
with so may tides.. haaa.
-Howlings
..my lady loves, I cannot say it enough, I just can't
mess'd me ponders up, it's fucking rippling
with so may tides.. haaa.
-Howlings
28th Jul 2016 12:49pm
Anonymous
31st Jul 2016 11:38pm
Brenda.. you're such a brilliant writer, and truthful soul..
Dave
Dave
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