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Un-Social media
Ethical and prideful
Family oriented
Character enforced
Manners and respectful
Thank-you and yes please
Miss, take my seat
You're welcome and excuse me
Polite, social grace
Now generation
Educated by advertising
Tethered to networks
Media driven
Text Communication
Symbols
Acronyms
Screen socialization
School system a hoax
Can't read or write
No one's left behind
Government passes
A parents worst fear
Intersection squeegee
Can't read an application
"Like fries with that Sir?"
Family oriented
Character enforced
Manners and respectful
Thank-you and yes please
Miss, take my seat
You're welcome and excuse me
Polite, social grace
Now generation
Educated by advertising
Tethered to networks
Media driven
Text Communication
Symbols
Acronyms
Screen socialization
School system a hoax
Can't read or write
No one's left behind
Government passes
A parents worst fear
Intersection squeegee
Can't read an application
"Like fries with that Sir?"
Published 2nd Apr 2016
| Edited 7th May 2016
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The author encourages honest critique.
This is a very astute and true observation
very well-written. I have often wondered
about the schools myself...and what's
become of them. Social media abuse
certainly hasn't contributed to the
overall situation in this country.
I will say that the final line seems a bit
of a let down, then I saw in my mind
"Want fries with that?" in quotation
marks, moved to the final line right
after 'parent's worst nightmare'.
See the difference the impact makes?
very well-written. I have often wondered
about the schools myself...and what's
become of them. Social media abuse
certainly hasn't contributed to the
overall situation in this country.
I will say that the final line seems a bit
of a let down, then I saw in my mind
"Want fries with that?" in quotation
marks, moved to the final line right
after 'parent's worst nightmare'.
See the difference the impact makes?
7th May 2016 5:57pm
Excellent feedback. Thanks. You're right about the last line. I'm going to edit as per your advice.
Thanks again for the honest feedback!
Thanks again for the honest feedback!
6th Apr 2016 2:20am
7th May 2016 5:58pm
8th Aug 2016 4:42pm
Could't agree more with your sentiment here. The state of the culture these days is just dreadful for the most part.
Your poem however is not dreadful. Simple, blunt and well stated.
good stuff and keep at it!
Your poem however is not dreadful. Simple, blunt and well stated.
good stuff and keep at it!
11th Dec 2016 1:28pm
Hey sorry for responding so late.
Thanks for reading and responding. I'm so pissed at my generation for not parenting and preparing there kids. Instead they try to be their child's friend and excuse their disrespectful behavior.
Thanks for reading and responding. I'm so pissed at my generation for not parenting and preparing there kids. Instead they try to be their child's friend and excuse their disrespectful behavior.
11th Nov 2017 4:04pm
11th Nov 2017 5:18pm
Oh how I wish it wasn't true.
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