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SIBLING
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I can't quote a night's sky
and do justice to its secrets,
yet sibling stars beckon,
they seem so close,
pulling veils of modesty
off of each other
while I'm poised
under an arc of silence,
its light tethering my gaze
even though time has
snuffed them long before
I stood alone in their wake.
Copyright ©2012-2016 Jade Pandora. All Rights Reserved.
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I can't quote a night's sky
and do justice to its secrets,
yet sibling stars beckon,
they seem so close,
pulling veils of modesty
off of each other
while I'm poised
under an arc of silence,
its light tethering my gaze
even though time has
snuffed them long before
I stood alone in their wake.
Copyright ©2012-2016 Jade Pandora. All Rights Reserved.
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Published 27th Mar 2016
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27th Mar 2016 1:46pm
I can see you standing under that broad curve of night, viewing those stars, receiving illumination for those long passed...
love this poems serenity...
this morning it's a gift I needed to receive...
geoff
love this poems serenity...
this morning it's a gift I needed to receive...
geoff
29th Mar 2016 9:21am
Thank you Geoffrey, I'm so glad my little ink gave you something soothing & calming, with imagery that was perfect to my intent.
27th Mar 2016 10:04pm
Wow. simply, wow. I re-read this a few times, and all i could see was me in my backyard out in the country. The milky way rolling above my head. I really , really like this, jade. Seriously!!
Aw thank you, Ed, that's perfect: where my poem took you, with the familiarity of home, yet surrounded by an atrium of that part of the universe that's part of your "local" 'hood. Every detail in sync with my words.🌙
And thank you for the RL: honored.🌠
And thank you for the RL: honored.🌠
28th Mar 2016 7:43am
You kept the focus way high; which is great. I was curious to see if personification might be involved.
It's about myself, away from the luminari pollution of over development, up in the high deserts of Antelope Valley on a night of a season when night skies have an almost fourth dimensional feel.
Thank you for sharing & enjoying.
Thank you for sharing & enjoying.
I remember that area. My dad worked with several homes for mentally disabled children in the region. From time to time I would go with him t work. The highlight of the trip would be stopping for a bottle of Pepsi. That was back when they still put real sugar in the soda.
Aah, simpler times...
and do you recall when the poppies bloomed, en mass, every spring, in colors of red, orange, yellow/gold, purple, blue & white, throught the high desert? My parents would take us (my sisters & I) up there during those times, to picnic & frolic.
and do you recall when the poppies bloomed, en mass, every spring, in colors of red, orange, yellow/gold, purple, blue & white, throught the high desert? My parents would take us (my sisters & I) up there during those times, to picnic & frolic.
28th Mar 2016 7:56am
Stars live a very long time. They may still be shining on each other long after we are gone... let us shine on one another in the meantime...
JJ
JJ
30th Mar 2016 1:09am
30th Mar 2016 2:07am
28th Mar 2016 4:29pm
Fantastic poem. The last stanza added an amazing perspective to it. Profound and aesthetically gorgeous. Timeless.
John
John
30th Mar 2016 3:17am
Thank you John, I really appreciate that. I've always had my head among the stars, since I can remember.
29th Mar 2016 1:49am
enjoying the companionship of kin
among the endless sky.
beautiful poetry...
among the endless sky.
beautiful poetry...
29th Mar 2016 11:55pm
My honey Jade.. .
you take me
place where i feel
graced in your
presence.
I deeply adore this one.
Wow.
-Howlings
you take me
place where i feel
graced in your
presence.
I deeply adore this one.
Wow.
-Howlings
30th Mar 2016 3:23am
My dear one, your words are always as poetry that stands on their own. You always make me feel how special it all is, and I thank you for your gracious share.
--Jade xo
--Jade xo
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