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one sided
I give so much and you take it
This is love when you fake it
I put my heart out there and you break it
It's like a battle the cannons shot
And here's the wall
Backfire
Here are the tears
I give so much and you take it
This is love when you fake it
A heart can take only so much
Smiley face
I love you
Stupid heart emoticons
I give so much
And you take it
Your love isn't real you fake it.
This is love when you fake it
I put my heart out there and you break it
It's like a battle the cannons shot
And here's the wall
Backfire
Here are the tears
I give so much and you take it
This is love when you fake it
A heart can take only so much
Smiley face
I love you
Stupid heart emoticons
I give so much
And you take it
Your love isn't real you fake it.
Published 18th Mar 2016
| Edited 29th Mar 2016
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29th Mar 2016 2:44am
Hullo
there's a nice rythym to the stanzas, ryhme scheme and the repeated couple of lines makes it lyrical
I was weighing up 'you fake it' rather than 'you're faking' ..not a lot of difference in fairness
again, I must say your honesty is a plus here,
Good stuff, fair play,
there's a nice rythym to the stanzas, ryhme scheme and the repeated couple of lines makes it lyrical
I was weighing up 'you fake it' rather than 'you're faking' ..not a lot of difference in fairness
again, I must say your honesty is a plus here,
Good stuff, fair play,
