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Dance
you're like the
bubbles
in my champagne....
when i hold you
in my mouth
you dance on my
tongue....
bubbles
in my champagne....
when i hold you
in my mouth
you dance on my
tongue....
Published 5th Mar 2016
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5th Mar 2016 00:24am
This is an exquisite little piece. You touch all the right spots in all the right ways.
5th Mar 2016 3:14am
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5th Mar 2016 7:29am
Tommie, you always say just the right things to gun my engine. Gives a whole new meaning to blowing bubbles. The seductive words in this piece are way too easily memorized and may be conjured in memory in inappropriate times...gee thanks :) Bravisima bella poeta! Even though it's so indelibly etched in my psyche, I'll add it too my list.
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5th Mar 2016 4:36pm
Fine work Tommie. It's playful but sensual, and a lover's effervescence dancing on your tongue is a refreshing and original idea. You deserve a man of rare vintage.
6th Mar 2016 2:16pm
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