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These 3 words
These three words:
Have scarred my heart.
These three words:
Have healed my soul.
These three words:
You whispered while holding me in your arms.
I love you, you said,
But what you love isn't within my heart,
it's between my legs.
Have scarred my heart.
These three words:
Have healed my soul.
These three words:
You whispered while holding me in your arms.
I love you, you said,
But what you love isn't within my heart,
it's between my legs.
Published 1st Jul 2011
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1st Jul 2011 3:59am
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1st Jul 2011 4:03am
It has that kick to the end that reverses everything said in it. Good one Trinity :D
1st Jul 2011 4:30am
I think my main qualm with this poem would be with "these 3 words" which is weak in my opinion. The repetition is fine but I think you can come up with something more powerful such "3 simple words", that speaks to me more than just plain old "these 3 words".
I liked the ending, I somehow wish it could be even more blunt, like a swift kick to the testicles. Overall, not too bad.
I liked the ending, I somehow wish it could be even more blunt, like a swift kick to the testicles. Overall, not too bad.
1st Jul 2011 4:34am
Thank you but the words to me are not simple and shouldn't be taken as lightly as they have been. 'I love you' is something that is tossed around now days and the meaning behind it seems to be fading into that of "3 simple words," which I truly hope they never come to be. Thank you again. :)
1st Jul 2011 5:24am
