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unhinged ~
she had a million dollar face
with passion lips, pouring her
word's into my glass
i drink her, she tastes like fire
with a hint of Jezynowka, she
became color in my
charcoal night and i
was unhinged
a mystery with a wisp of hope,
i lift up her dress, she says "honey
cum right along"
ready for long winded kisses
the kind that turn night's
into mornings
i say "one more for the road"
she smiles and lights
me up
with passion lips, pouring her
word's into my glass
i drink her, she tastes like fire
with a hint of Jezynowka, she
became color in my
charcoal night and i
was unhinged
a mystery with a wisp of hope,
i lift up her dress, she says "honey
cum right along"
ready for long winded kisses
the kind that turn night's
into mornings
i say "one more for the road"
she smiles and lights
me up
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Re. unhinged ~
17th Feb 2016 1:13am
Tommie. This is fantastic! I love the metaphors and the comfortable atmosphere you generate It makes one want to find this kind of solace. Brava ma amie!
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17th Feb 2016 3:45am
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17th Feb 2016 3:47am
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17th Feb 2016 9:12am
it's got a great noir punch to it, Tommie.
it lights up the dark night,
till I blow out the light...
it lights up the dark night,
till I blow out the light...
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17th Feb 2016 1:12pm
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18th Feb 2016 1:09pm
Oh honey i dig this poem...
This is uber sexy and remains super classy...
Gives great body to sapphic romance...Have been meaning to read you for a while...so happy i did..
Nice to meet you...
i say "one more for the road"
she smiles and lights
me up
Great last lines...🎼
love
j
This is uber sexy and remains super classy...
Gives great body to sapphic romance...Have been meaning to read you for a while...so happy i did..
Nice to meet you...
i say "one more for the road"
she smiles and lights
me up
Great last lines...🎼
love
j
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Re: Re. unhinged ~
18th Feb 2016 5:20pm
You're very kind J, I truly appreciate your words and thank you so much for reading me! 😊