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Midnite Approaching
Bring the hurt, bring the pain, shatter the sky, splintered with rain.
Stifle all sound, vibrations abstain, quell every verse, suppress the refrain.
Hide the sun, restrain the moon, extinguish the stars, curse every boon.
Keep me locked away in an unventilated dark musty room.
Otherwise let me loose and don't try to run, hide or escape my wrath.
Stay out of my way, don't be an immovable obstacle in my juggernaut path.
Midnite's coming, the hour arrives, tension grows higher...
Hide your weak, sick & venerable, douse my lit fires....
When I take my place there will be no survivors...
Only corpses & ash were there were cheaters and liars.
Midnite Approaching.
Published 22nd Jan 2016
| Edited 27th Jan 2016
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23rd Jan 2016 11:33am
I've always found it to be a very creative thing when people relate their writing to their user name, or elude to their other writing in creative ways. You've at least done the first here, which got me hooked.
I also really appreciated the pace of this one. It had a rhythm of its' own, and that's very hard to find: It's another element of artistic style I can appreciate.
On the subject of content: I loved it, simply put. I felt a duality -- a feeling of being locked away, maybe a fear of it, coupled with a ferocious will to overcome and destroy.
This work captures perfectly the Ire side of life, and I hope you don't mind me saying so. Can't wait to read more from you.
A.I.
I also really appreciated the pace of this one. It had a rhythm of its' own, and that's very hard to find: It's another element of artistic style I can appreciate.
On the subject of content: I loved it, simply put. I felt a duality -- a feeling of being locked away, maybe a fear of it, coupled with a ferocious will to overcome and destroy.
This work captures perfectly the Ire side of life, and I hope you don't mind me saying so. Can't wait to read more from you.
A.I.
28th Jan 2016 2:09pm
Thank you so much for your kind words of inspiration! This was a fun write for me and I even edited it slightly recently... Now it has an even better cadence to it I think. I'm flattered that you enjoyed it and hope to keep you entertained.
