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Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS🎏
( Jade-Pandora & Hepcat61)
Buddha
the one who sees all
namu amida butsu
crane on utmost branch
(geoff)
only the tree
sees the crane standing
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Dharma
emptied to be filled
namu amida butsu
sun in morning fog
(geoff)
morning fog
hiding day's new sun in vain
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Sangha
encompassing all
namu amida butsu
a wind in wheat fields
(geoff)
prayer flags
sending proof that wind exists
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Namu Amida Butsu means
"total reliance upon the compassion of Amida Buddha."
Nen Nen Fu Ri Shin means
"Thought after thought are not separate from mind."
Preview photograph by Dennis (France)
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Buddha
the one who sees all
namu amida butsu
crane on utmost branch
(geoff)
only the tree
sees the crane standing
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Dharma
emptied to be filled
namu amida butsu
sun in morning fog
(geoff)
morning fog
hiding day's new sun in vain
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Sangha
encompassing all
namu amida butsu
a wind in wheat fields
(geoff)
prayer flags
sending proof that wind exists
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Namu Amida Butsu means
"total reliance upon the compassion of Amida Buddha."
Nen Nen Fu Ri Shin means
"Thought after thought are not separate from mind."
Preview photograph by Dennis (France)
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Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 6th Jan 2016
| Edited 22nd Dec 2019
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Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
6th Jan 2016 2:18pm
I love this... everything about it...
But I love most that it happened so organically...
Thanks, Jade
But I love most that it happened so organically...
Thanks, Jade
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Yes, organically!
No, thank you.
p.s. and notice - English-language Japanese short poetry doesn't have to follow the 5/7/5 syllable count which doesn't even exist. The Japanese haijin use a sound symbol count, which is shorter than syllables. my grasshopper...
No, thank you.
p.s. and notice - English-language Japanese short poetry doesn't have to follow the 5/7/5 syllable count which doesn't even exist. The Japanese haijin use a sound symbol count, which is shorter than syllables. my grasshopper...
Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
6th Jan 2016 3:58pm
What a collaboration...beautiful.:)I wish I could write like that. Talented write, Jade and Geoff.
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6th Jan 2016 5:10pm
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6th Jan 2016 5:21pm
I'm amazed, for all of your accomplishments, dear - it means a great deal, how glad I am to see you have enjoyed our effort, and I thank you most humbly.
Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
6th Jan 2016 4:50pm
i saw this one in the competition thread [&] while i was awed by your first submission... this one... oh this one is something special indeed ...
... adore the foot note, proof that the two of you coalesce seamlessly [a marvel]
bravo to you both
xo
... adore the foot note, proof that the two of you coalesce seamlessly [a marvel]
bravo to you both
xo
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shadoe,
Thank you so much... your comment humbles... I find no adequate words...
once again, thank you, jade...
Thank you so much... your comment humbles... I find no adequate words...
once again, thank you, jade...
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Re: Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
Dear Katja, yes, this collab was in the comp but I took it out, realizing that we were allowed what we already had put up. I almost took that one down and left this one, but I just didn't know. The other one you also saw is our second collab, the one Geoff and I haven't published yet. And thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and appreciation of our work with us.
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Katja, I'm happy to update you about the following:
It's all been worked out that this collab, CHANTINGS, will be the entry that will count, and the other, HIT MAN, will remain up as an example, something that hopefully will help encourage more people to join in the comp fun, yaay!
The version of CHANTINGS over on the comp thread uses the 5/7/5 count as per the rule, and this one here that I posted, is unchanged except now it includes a wonderful Zen chant, like Geoff has for his pieces. Now it makes sense that chantings is plural. And again, thank you so much.
It's all been worked out that this collab, CHANTINGS, will be the entry that will count, and the other, HIT MAN, will remain up as an example, something that hopefully will help encourage more people to join in the comp fun, yaay!
The version of CHANTINGS over on the comp thread uses the 5/7/5 count as per the rule, and this one here that I posted, is unchanged except now it includes a wonderful Zen chant, like Geoff has for his pieces. Now it makes sense that chantings is plural. And again, thank you so much.
Re: Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
7th Jan 2016 2:34pm
oh how wonderful!
i'm stoked you went with this entry [a winning choice, without a doubt]
these intonations echo so fervidly
they cannot be swept aside
xo
i'm stoked you went with this entry [a winning choice, without a doubt]
these intonations echo so fervidly
they cannot be swept aside
xo
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8th Jan 2016 4:57am
Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
The story is as beautiful as the completed work.
Some things just flow together, especially people
and words. So happy we get to witness such beauty
become one from two. Well done.
Some things just flow together, especially people
and words. So happy we get to witness such beauty
become one from two. Well done.
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Dearest Ahavati,
I'm so glad the flow of our mutual energy & imagery gently surrounds you in the world we share. ✨💫
💗for adding to your RL
I'm so glad the flow of our mutual energy & imagery gently surrounds you in the world we share. ✨💫
💗for adding to your RL
Re: Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
7th Jan 2016 1:08pm
Ahavati
Thank you for this... "somethings just flow together"... exactly... how this came to be... your comment is very much appreciated...
geoff
Thank you for this... "somethings just flow together"... exactly... how this came to be... your comment is very much appreciated...
geoff
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7th Jan 2016 1:03am
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7th Jan 2016 1:54am
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Re: Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
7th Jan 2016 1:15pm
todski28
thank you, I borrowed your words, to show my appreciation to jade, whose photo, structure, and foot notes turned this into art...
"like water pouring into the same cup"
I love how accurate that is... and how zen...
geoff
thank you, I borrowed your words, to show my appreciation to jade, whose photo, structure, and foot notes turned this into art...
"like water pouring into the same cup"
I love how accurate that is... and how zen...
geoff
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Re: Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
8th Jan 2016 5:03am
Thank you so humbly, dear Tod. How honored I am that you have come here to share in a way that touches the Zen in me.🙏
Re. Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
this is immaculate...
jade, I love the comments above, especially katja's and todski28... "like water pouring into the same cup"
I create words...
you create... art!
heart fills to bursting...
jade, I love the comments above, especially katja's and todski28... "like water pouring into the same cup"
I create words...
you create... art!
heart fills to bursting...
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