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Tumbler
Just one of those freak accidents
Tripping on a torn carpet
Landing face-first, hard,
On the table's edge
Head snapping back
Fade to black...
Then a slow return to living color
"Where's the blood?," he wonders
"I feel no evidence of a crushed nose
No shredded lips or shattered teeth
And no dislocated neck
What gives?"
"Calm yourself," a dark angel whispers
"Perhaps another time
Your hour's turning late
But sorry, babe, you'll have to wait."
Tripping on a torn carpet
Landing face-first, hard,
On the table's edge
Head snapping back
Fade to black...
Then a slow return to living color
"Where's the blood?," he wonders
"I feel no evidence of a crushed nose
No shredded lips or shattered teeth
And no dislocated neck
What gives?"
"Calm yourself," a dark angel whispers
"Perhaps another time
Your hour's turning late
But sorry, babe, you'll have to wait."
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3rd Jan 2016 7:14pm
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3rd Jan 2016 7:38pm
this was amazing crowfly...the "what gives" really expands this into multiply dimension...til i cant really tell if he's happy or sad about it...brilliant grey area and i loved it.
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5th Jan 2016 9:08pm
Thanks poeticDesire! I think it's best to furnish a bit of information then let the reader decide. More fun that way!
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Gasp! Oh! T Crow..you don't do this to me! Stay upright puulllleeez! And do not even look that angel in the eye..she was right and polite this time..
Great write through, yes...and the pic with it..perfection.
All my tight love darlin
Jen
Great write through, yes...and the pic with it..perfection.
All my tight love darlin
Jen
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5th Jan 2016 9:10pm
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5th Jan 2016 9:12pm
Remember Gerald Ford? He had a reputation as being a klutz. Maybe I'm in good company. Maybe I should run for Pres as an independent. Thanks Gabriel!
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Anonymous
4th Jan 2016 2:19am
Hey Crow...what a great write.......kind of the feeling of a tempting dark Angel......glad she didn't want you now......intriguing writte......enjoyed xo :)
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5th Jan 2016 9:15pm
This angel didn't want me to check out too soon. Maybe a temptress and guardian both. Thanks Flower!
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4th Jan 2016 3:29am
Well thats one lucky bump. Live a life to enjoy another day eh.:) good read Crowfly.
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5th Jan 2016 9:16pm
Turns out that fall had a few consequences, nothing major hopefully. Thanks Grace!
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4th Jan 2016 10:33am
i'm totally spazzy like this too crow, then need to wait for partner to get home & pick me up wherever i managed to land o.O
aint fun & games innit.
aint fun & games innit.
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5th Jan 2016 9:21pm
The actual fall's no fun at all but writing about it's good for grins. You sound like you've had it much rougher than myself. I'm sure I'll need some assistance one day fairly soon. Thanks Katja!
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4th Jan 2016 12:40pm
Whenever I see a glass coffee table I have a silent fear doing just what you described in the first part. Glad it wasn't a killer. I'm sure it hurt like a mother.
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5th Jan 2016 9:22pm
It's interesting that some of the pain is delayed reaction, felt a couple of days later. Thanks DPW!
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4th Jan 2016 6:00pm
No disappointment here Mr.C, if this indeed happened to you, I'm very happy you evaded the inevitable! I just love the little writes inspired by true events ;) You always have a clever way to put it to paper.
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5th Jan 2016 9:26pm
Thanks Lookie! I try to "keep it real," but my life isn't the most exciting. Just have to improvise, I guess. An angel might help if she's available.
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5th Jan 2016 9:28pm
Thanks Taryn! No breakage as far as I can tell, just a little embarrassment. No harm in a little slapstick I suppose.
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15th Jan 2016 8:57pm
Hah! Love your image, and love the poem even better.
Oh, I've been there, done that, and that same angel
must have been hovering around me at that time, even
outran a bullet once upon a time . . . Shudda warned me
about messing with married women . . . Unfortunately it
didn't . . .
Oh, I've been there, done that, and that same angel
must have been hovering around me at that time, even
outran a bullet once upon a time . . . Shudda warned me
about messing with married women . . . Unfortunately it
didn't . . .
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